Peer Critique: #20

[enriana]

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[lady_akatari]

Ooh, a critique! ::drags both of her icons in, because constant work towards improvement is good:: (And thank you, everyone who thought they were good - ::dances::)




Critiques of either or both would be lovely; thank you in advance. ^.^

[itsdatkrzymix24]

both of these icons are very well done.

first icon: love the text and the hazyiness of the image but i would have staggered "rose" and "in midwinter" so that they didn't start at the same place or even enlarged the word rose.

second icon: love the quote and the position of the words, and the way it fades. I would have chose a different, more softer color for the text just because red is such a strong color especially for so much text.

great job!

[lady_akatari]

Thank you. ^^ I'll definitely keep the suggestions in mind for the future (especially the roses/in midwinter text, as that seems to be the common problem with that icon).

[nachzes]

I actually liked the non-staggered text. =D (Just to make things difficult, you know.) I like it because it helps fill in that empty(ier) space on the top-left side of the icon, instead of crowding the pretty pretty image. But that's just me.

[enriana]

#1:

Very lovely, but the text seems rather bunched together. I think you could make "roses" a few sizes bigger and move "in midwinter" down to the bottom of the icon; that might be nicer. I'd also suggest a different pixel font that took up less room than Silkscreen.

#2 is really lovely and I really have no critique for it, you did an excellent job. :)

[lady_akatari]

Thank you! ^_^

Do you have a suggestion for pixel fonts that I might have used instead? I tried Grudblitter, but it seemed a little too hard and edgy to me with that picture. :\

[enriana]

dafont.com's "bitmap/pixel font" section has a TON of great pixel fonts, maybe peruse there?

[genarti]

1 is lovely. I really like it just as-is, although I think the suggestion of staggering the two lines a little instead of purely left-justifying them isn't a bad one.

2 has good composition, and I love the background picture -- the color saturation is great, and the way the bright red flowers give the impression of a riot of life and color while the sky means that the text isn't superimposed on a lot of busy distracting stuff. The text itself could use work to my eye, though. I'm not wild about the font -- I'd choose something a little smoother and more rounded, I think -- and I definitely wouldn't do it bright red. Something darker and subtler, like a blue dark enough to stand out against the background, would keep the words visible without making the image so very busy and, well, red.