One shot - I'm dancing 'til dawn
Title: I'm dancing ‘til dawn
Pairing: ohmiya
Rating: PG
Length ~2900 words
Genre: Romance, slice of life
Disclaimer: Fiction! :)
Summary: A bunch of ohmiya short stories spread over many years, inspired by a Maroon5 song.
Note: Re-arranged some of the lyrics to fit with the structure of the story
( { I'm lifting you up I'm letting you down I'm dancing ‘til dawn I'm fooling around I'm not giving up } )
I'll check it out later. :)
A lot of the sentences ryhme. Esp conversation between Aiba and Nino. Mostly on Nino parts.
I gotta say my feelings is divided. As right as the sentences in the banter is, I feel like reading a ryhme. So there's a feeling of disconnected to the story a bit. Ya know?
Anyway, it's not bad. But I can't say it's up to the usual you I love. Well, that's for me at least.
Maybe it's caused I'm not too into song fic with your arrangement? I usually have one with each incident with few paragraphs of the lyrics then the happening and the lyrics, the fic, the lyrics.
kind of like that.
So I guess I am feeling disoriented caused a lot of their dialogue ryhmes and make me difficult to cut it as song lyrics or as fics plots.
Can you understand what I am saying? Lol I am a mess now.
Anyway I really love the part where Nino don't actually comfort Ohchan right away. As romantic ideal as it is. I think I understand it more if Nino need time cause he is in pain before helping Ohno. This is more like reality than just saying "Ok, it's in the past. I forgive you" or "there is nothing to forgive. You are not wrong. The reporter is".
Mehh that is just too forgiving.
the way you write that particular incidents. Like it!! ☺
Thanksss.
My comment is too long. I'm sorry. ^ ^;
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I understand what you mean, maybe i should have separated the lyrics more from the story. i did it like this because sometimes it was only short parts of lyrics which linked to the story.
Happy you liked the scandal part, thank you ^ ^
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