[Lamento] Vicissitudes of Life

[aphelion_orion]

Title: Vicissitudes of Life
Fandom: Lamento - Beyond the Void
Pairing: Rai/Konoe
Rating: G
Warnings: none

Comments

[yhibiki]

\o/ Lamento fic!

Heh, I love the imagery in this: the musty trunk of ideas and principles, the very stickiness of the heat, the wringing water from the moss... It's also such a laaazy feeling, just lying there sweating. I think you created a good atmosphere. :)

Not sure what to say about the second-person perspective; it's not my favorite POV and I think this piece might have worked in third person as well (the part with Bardo ends up a bit confusing in this POV, I think) but overall it works and got the meaning across.

[aphelion_orion]

Thanks, I'm glad you like the atmosphere. It's one of those things that make the game interesting; the feeling that you can almost touch what's going on.

What was it you found confusing exactly? I might be able to fix that. As for the perspective, it is a different kind of writing. "You" takes you a lot closer to the character than the third person, so it's not really a question of whether it would've worked in that perspective. XD

AHHHH!!! I HATE SUMMER!!

[mizukiaoi]

Thank to yaoilover019 from youtube. I get a better understanding of lamento(Rai is too sexy for his own good).
Yes, another fanfic from you, but this make me run to the pool and stay there all day. I could image Bardo making Rai anger and Konoe blush. He a funny old man and he helpful to Konoe.
I love how Rai and Konoe are just cuddling and being lazy due to the heat. Thank you and keep up the good work.

Re: AHHHH!!! I HATE SUMMER!!

[aphelion_orion]

*laughs* I actually love summer (it's been way too cold here). I guess my anticipation ran away with me.

XD Poor Rai, he's really not used to friendly teasing. Thankfully, Bardo can handle it.

[sugarcakey]

Why didn't I see this earlier oO

Much love <3

[aphelion_orion]

Whoops, I keep not seeing comments on this journal. orz And I'm glad you liked it. :)