Comments | ofbirdsandwires: (без темы)

ofbirdsandwires

(Untitled)

Mar 23, 2006 16:44

I love you, softly spoken and rhyming with nothing but the tap- tap-trapping sound of rain on the roof (where I go walking, skipping air under my skin to blow up and away). Picked up a brush and painted you fresh earth colours, rich purple and sudden orange (paint in my hair and on my tongue until you tasted the right shade), picked the grass out ( Read more... )

Comments 24

stuck_on_go March 23 2006, 17:44:05 UTC

dense with metaphors and meaning,
your words have a rhythm that's comforting
a rhythm that never fails.

ofbirdsandwires March 25 2006, 08:37:36 UTC

I can't outrun these metaphors, so I pack them in tightly around my bones and watch them seep into everything

(because it's easier to see something in relation to something else, because everything comes back to bones, or water, or birds, or distance)

stillmotion March 23 2006, 19:45:41 UTC

oh oh i am incoherent oh

stillmotion March 23 2006, 19:47:32 UTC

you have made me incoherent. various feelings and exclamations rushing crowding tripping.

ofbirdsandwires March 26 2006, 22:01:35 UTC

tell me about them?
(she says after two comments with the word 'incoherent' in them...)

stillmotion March 26 2006, 23:11:43 UTC

i'll try.

it makes me feel beautiful because the love is beautiful. it makes me feel lonely because the love is beautiful and my love has just ended.

oh colours. kaleidoscope. i am spun by the richness. sensuous words.

and two birds at the ending and hands apart together soars it all up up like my heart shooting from my chest in a blazing arc.

ofbirdsandwires March 27 2006, 21:43:41 UTC

my love is entirely unrequited, so I'll join you in lonely (if only for a little while (I hope (I hope I hope)))

Your post with all of the colours made my fingers numb,
writing each one down in my notebook because they have to mean something, and it feels safe and beautiful to know all of these words for different things.

heynameless March 23 2006, 22:50:51 UTC

"you don't need to drive, you can catch my breath instead"

That's really clever, I love it.

ofbirdsandwires March 24 2006, 15:36:51 UTC

hahah, thanks
I was impressed with my own cleverness, and then it kind of made me cringe - which is actually what it was supposed to do, so I guess I got it right.

psuedosentence March 23 2006, 23:10:30 UTC

your words. there is no word for them.

ofbirdsandwires March 25 2006, 08:34:25 UTC

my personal favourite for them is 'convoluted', with 'ridiculous' coming in at a close second

Thank you, oolie.