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[odyssey01]

Actually, there's a half-inked picture of Seamus and Dean on my desk I meant to work on today but that'll have until tomorrow. Instead I tried my hand at a little dare…

Title: Fire and Ice
Rating: PG-15 for some swearing and innuendo.
Warnings: Heavy spoilers for Eclipse!!!
Summary: The infamous tent-scene from Edward's POV.
Disclaimer: All

Comments

[snuggle_muggle]

This was excellent! I loved it and it was so true to Edward's character, plus I think it answered some of the questions about his change in personality in this book. It makes sense that Esme would have talked to him and told him to back off a bit. Anyway, very well written!

[odyssey01]

Thank you :)

Actually, Edward's personality in the first half of the book bothered me quite a lot, so I really couldn't resist adding that little Esme-tidbit. Several times I felt like he was taking it too far and someone should smack him over the head.

I'm very glad you enjoyed it :)

[cinnamon_kisses]

Wow, that was fast!

Oh, poooor Edward. Should have punched Jacob when he had the chance! Grr.

[odyssey01]

Heh. Well, once inspiration strikes there's nothing I can do about it but give in.

Perhaps you should write a scene where the boys get into a fight because I do agree - Edward should have punched him.

[cinnamon_kisses]

Oh...trust me, it's only a matter of time.

Actually, that's in the next chapter of my fic! I almost forgot. *happy sigh* Thanks for reminding me. I feel much more cheerful now.

[odyssey01]

Is that so? I was planning on leaving a few comments there and now as you make it even more alluring - how can I resist any longer? ;)

[get_out_alive24]

LOVED IT! Amazing work! You were really true to Edward's POV. =D

[odyssey01]

Thank you! :D

I'm very happy you like it because I put a lot of work into this and I'm so glad that it pays off :)

[book_rapport]

This is lovely! There are so many bits I just have to quote back at you:

If I were prone to over-dramatize things I'd even say I'm facing the worst night in the history of mankind but let's be realistic: it's merely the worst night of the century.

This made me giggle! Edward's voice is so wry-- absolutely perfect. :)

"Go to sleep, Jacob. You're starting to get on my nerves." Which translates to: you're only a hair's breadth away from becoming my dinner.

Hee! This, and the exposition on floss, made me laugh.

'Since I wanted to prevent you from taking the spot,' I think with a hint of bitter sarcasm then opt to tell him the truth.

A nice insight into Edward's emotions-- Jacob was right about Edward being manipulative, but ultimately Edward really does have Bella's best interests at heart, and you've shown that clearly.

Damn the dog for being so…like-able. And damn my tendency to go looking for love and friendship in the oddest…the most unnatural…places.What a fantastic last line. It really highlights one of the things I

[odyssey01]

It's your comment that's lovely. Seriously, thank you for putting so much thought into this *hugs*

As for the points you mentioned: In my mind Edward has - deep down - a very playful attitude (as hinted at via his behaviour with Emmett i.e.) and I wanted to stress this fact. I fell in love with the Edward we were introduced to in Twilight and *that* Edward had a problem controlling his temper, was a wee bit arrogant and did have that dry sense of humor IMO. I feel like lately these traits of character have been overshadowed.

Then I do believe that oral hygiene is a very important topic, of course ;)

Next to that I also wanted to show that Edward is far from that perfect man Bella thinks him to be. He has his flaws - numerous ones - but he's clever and too charming for his own good. I'm glad you liked this ambivalence of his character :)

Finally I'm very glad you liked this so much. I don't know who gave the prompt but I was drawn to it immediately and it was nothing short of fascinating to write it :)

[adair7]

fantastic! this was one of my favorite scenes in the book and there are so many things that you can do with fanfic with it and I think you did a spectacular job.

[odyssey01]

Thank you so much :)

I loved this scene as well and therefore really couldn't resist fulfilling that particular prompt :)