wedding ceremony help
hey friends! I am trying to write some poems and etc for our ceremony and would LOVE some honest comments on one that I recently wrote. Can you please let me know if you think it is suitable for the ceremony and if you like it? I would appreciate it heaps! I don't know what it's called...
Oh and if you have any ideas for good secular readings to include please send that idea along!
Here goes:
Into the windows of the carriage we float
Coupled passengers intertwined lives
The track is being built as the train passes over it
We glide together mixing and clashing
Sometimes the confusion leads us to wonder
Where chaos flounces and hot history ferments
I forget what my life is without your heart
An ember that I take with me
No longer forlorn or wanting
It glows and sings when I hold it
Lean toward me and I will also surrender
A part of my heart for you to embrace
We can sit in separate carriages at times
We can look idly at rustic pastoral scenes
But I hold the spark of you always
And you look at a cityscape a beach a sunrise
And clasp the most of me with you
Reunite and elide as we build that train track
Another carriage may be built
Some may be refurbished
Yet we go and go and go
Running sleeping breathing laughing kissing loving
Comforted by a lack of destination
Riveted by a hope of forever
And when there is a harvest moon we sit
And hear the strains of music that link all the tracks
Directions and misdirections
For this our life
This is our life.
Together.
Oh and if you have any ideas for good secular readings to include please send that idea along!
Here goes:
Into the windows of the carriage we float
Coupled passengers intertwined lives
The track is being built as the train passes over it
We glide together mixing and clashing
Sometimes the confusion leads us to wonder
Where chaos flounces and hot history ferments
I forget what my life is without your heart
An ember that I take with me
No longer forlorn or wanting
It glows and sings when I hold it
Lean toward me and I will also surrender
A part of my heart for you to embrace
We can sit in separate carriages at times
We can look idly at rustic pastoral scenes
But I hold the spark of you always
And you look at a cityscape a beach a sunrise
And clasp the most of me with you
Reunite and elide as we build that train track
Another carriage may be built
Some may be refurbished
Yet we go and go and go
Running sleeping breathing laughing kissing loving
Comforted by a lack of destination
Riveted by a hope of forever
And when there is a harvest moon we sit
And hear the strains of music that link all the tracks
Directions and misdirections
For this our life
This is our life.
Together.