LJ idol : Koro (home game)

[octavia_blue]

My husband is a brave and passionate man, but can be somewhat impulsive.

I knew this when I married him. That is how he won my heart after all; scaling the vines to my bedroom every night; writing the most outrageous love poetry that awakened a fire inside my loins; slaying enough rabid dwarves to raise the bounty so he could purchase my golden

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[murielle]

Delightful! I will carry the image of the...nestlings...for a long time. A well told tale.

[octavia_blue]

Thanks so much! I got the image of the 'nestlings' (wish I thought of that word ;-) ! ) when I was reading the Wikipedia article and knew I had to write something that had them in it: "Witches were said to store the removed genitals in birds' nests or in boxes, where they move themselves like living members and eat oats and corn" (Wikipedia)

[i_17bingo]

There were a number of bird's nests on the tree, each with some type of unusual soft pink creature huddled together.

Uh... wait... are those...? Are they...?

"Which one is my husband's?"

Oh my God, they are.

I think more than the how weird and funny this was, I particularly enjoyed the implication of the power of the... um... soft pink creature has over even the best of men. When I first saw that the witch was giving the wives the opportunity to freely take or leave the... um... soft pink creatures, I had envisioned evil trickery. Instead what you got was an act of love and an act, oddly enough considering the subject matter, of hope. This was unusual and funny.

But none of this answers the most important question brought up by this piece: How many rabid dwarves do you have to kill to earn enough for an engagement ring? Is it a lot, meaning that they're more of an infestation than a menace? Or was it a handful, implying the danger these little, foamning-at-the-mouth guys represent.

So. Many. Questions!

[octavia_blue]

I have a read a lot of your comments for many writers and I have to say you truly deserve a medal i_17bingo for giving such great and generous feedback (I personally think it says a lot about you as a person :-) !) I was interested by many of the ideas about this (I don't think I quite pulled it off, totally not meant as a bad pun, but enjoyed the writing of it). I thought of ending it with the wife bringing back a box at the end and being asked "Pandora, what's in your box?" by her husband (man these unintended double entendre just write themselves!) but didn't feel completely confident about that as an end! (I think women sometimes are more likely than men to make the pragmatic but unromantic decision!)

I can answer one question of yours: 13 rabid dwarves will get you enough gold for a ring. Maybe as few as eight if they are particularly hairy.

[i_17bingo]

Does the hair give the dwarfs superpowers?

Also, I would like to have seen the husband scream, "What's in the box! What's in the box!" like Brad Pitt at the end of Se7en. And I think, considering what would be in the box, his freakout would be totally understandable.

[octavia_blue]

Now that would be a fantastic ending!

The hairy dwarf thing is a long standing part of discrimination against follicly-gifted men of short stature. It probably relates back to the old saying: "If a dwarf has taken the time to shave, he's probably going to behave."

[bleodswean]

Ha!!! You and I found our way through wiki to the same results, it would seem! This was an unique perspective! Well done!

[octavia_blue]

Yes I loved seeing how you used similar information to create such a different and wonderfully rich world! Thanks so much for reading! (You are a fantastic writer!!)

[halfshellvenus]

I really liked the setup for this, with the fairytale background and an overly ambitious husband.

I also like that the witch's reason for the thefts were all for the greater good, though how puzzling to be confronted with a future you would have simply fallen into without warning.

My husband is a brave and passionate man, but is never impulsive.
Or in this case, you have warning but you are blind to the truth in it. That is also very, very human.

[ext_2828400]

Great story, I really enjoyed reading it!

[octavia_blue]

Thanks!!!