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[fic post] One Should Be Wary What One Says Around Charles

Jul 21, 2009 15:59

Title: One Should Be Wary What One Says Around Charles
Rating: G
Genre: idek. romance I guess
Pairings or Characters: implied Charles/Jay, implied Metis/Josh
Warnings: none
Word Count: 264
Summary: If even Metis notices, maybe Charles should, too.
Author Notes: Popping my HoneySyn fanfic writing cherry. Because it's about damn time. >8[ I love them ( Read more... )

honeydew syndrome, pairing -- charles/jay, !fic, pairing -- metis/josh, rating -- [g]

Comments 7

aibari July 22 2009, 07:14:03 UTC

\o/

The characterisations are spot on and the writing is pretty. Also: CUTE. *lessthanthree*

And the last line, ahahaha Charles.

(Dude, the HonSyn ending really came from out of the blue for me. It was like, OH AND THEN THESE CHARACTERS HAVE A REALLY FUCKED UP RELATIONSHIP, THE END. Which, er. Okay.)

oceansex July 22 2009, 10:09:31 UTC

*o*

alsk;fjghfskl thank youuuu. I'm always nervous about my grip on characters (always), especially when writing for a series with characters I've never written before, so YOU HAVE MADE ME FEEL MUCH LESS NERVOUS. /loves. and, uh. I needed to give the guys some cute. Josh/Metis cute is easy, but Charles/Jay cute is SO MUCH HARDER. guh.

the lad is very much a bastard. but a strangely lovable one, so he is forgiven. <3

(IKR. when I first read it I was just going wtffff. but then everyone in the lj comm was bitching and moaning, and I was like, 'well at least we got an end instead of nothing.' besides, now I can write lots of fix-it and future fics, which is never a bad thing 8D)

aibari July 22 2009, 21:54:59 UTC

DON'T BE NERVOUS, BB! :)

Charles is impervious to ordinary-cute. He's a bit like David Sedaris that way. ("THE PERFECT FLAG FOR THE LGBT MOVEMENT WOULD BE THE SKULL AND CROSSBONES, GODDAMMIT!")

(I guess my problem with it was that it didn't feel like a natural ending. I NEED MY RESOLUTION. ;_;
... on the other hand, this is light-years better than just leaving it hanging.

urae August 17 2009, 04:53:47 UTC

It was written very well, but I'm having trouble pin-pointing who is talking when and who "he" is during the second paragraph. Maybe you could add a bit more detail to clue us all in?
Other than that, lovely drabble ♥

oceansex August 20 2009, 06:32:48 UTC

it's supposed to be Metis talking to Charles in the second paragraph. sorry that it seems a bit confusing!

but thank you! C:

adistoria August 24 2009, 01:08:43 UTC

Oh hey this was really lovely *_*

...will there be more? I really want more ._.

oceansex August 26 2009, 06:28:51 UTC

thank you *___*

yes, there will definitely be more! but I'm afraid I'm nowhere near as talented as some of the other fanfic writers in the fandom, so I don't know how in-character my future Charles/Jay fics will turn out (and they will, more likely than not, be Charles/Jay, because I'm obsessed with them lol).