Slipping Into Darkness... Ch. 1

[o2binla]

Title:  Slipping Into Darkness...
Description:  Canon AU.  My first attempt at a multi-part story!  Er, writing stuff besides smex is challenging, I've found.  Please bear with me. 
Warnings:  Oh yeah!  Angst, depression, and MO!Jack.  I've decided he deserves another kind of story, or at any rate, this plot bunny got stuck in my head.  Not sure

Comments

[vln_bbmfan]

Great start! You've captured the total despair that I've always felt would rule Jack after that last meeting with Ennis (even without the "you're the reason I'm like this" line in the movie that isn't in the OS).
No way could Jack just go back to settling for one or two weeks a year. That had been a line-drawing moment.
I think this is very plausible, and how it would have been (at least the MO!Jack angle) if Jack had not died.
Looking forward to the rest of the story. :-)

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[cathyinaz]

I always wondered that about canon Jack, who I believe would have either moved on or slowly died inside anyway after that last harsh rejection from Ennis, if he hadn't actually died in the story.

It is very plausible that Jack would have moved on after that last meeting. But I always hold out hope that losing Jack would be enough to finally get Ennis off his butt, if he lost Jack that way, instead of to death, maybe he would still be able to do something about it when he realized how much he threw away.

Re: Count me in...

[vln_bbmfan]

But I always hold out hope that losing Jack would be enough to finally get Ennis off his butt, if he lost Jack that way, instead of to death, maybe he would still be able to do something about it when he realized how much he threw away.
That may be true, but as Jack found out over 20 yrs, it takes two to have a relationship. Will Jack be willing to walk away from the life he has made with someone else (I don't see him moving on with someone he doesn't have genuine feelings for) to give Ennis another chance?
Looking forward to seeing how you approach this dilemma, assuming that Ennis will be reappearing at some point in your story. :-)

Re: Count me in...

[o2binla]

There's definitely more hope if both of them are still alive, though Ennis doesn't know about the shirts and is too frightened to change. The only person Jack can actually change is himself...

[o2binla]

Hi Vicky, Thank you for reading! I too think a line had been drawn and Jack couldn't go back, and I'd like to see him do something other than die. Even if it involves getting with someone else.