Flames

[nyxelestia]

Title: Flames

Rating: PG

Summary: Sequel to 'Flowers'. Merlin's POV, this time - when he reveals his magic to Morgana and helps her learn, their sneaking about gets noticed. And Arthur starts acting stranger, again, because of it.

Pairing: Arthur/Merlin, background Morgana/Gwen

Warnings: Mild swearing, I guess, hints of violence

Episode warnings: 203

Comments

[tetsubinatu]

OK I loved it but you did ask for criticism and I love to be helpful! *G*

So long as you do not beget me with child, no
This should be either 'so long as you do not get me with child' or 'so long as we do not beget a child'.

Yea…he thinks you took me away from him
The word yea was a bit odd there. Did you mean 'yeah'? Because yea, pronounced 'yay' is more... ummm, formal I guess? It sort of fits, because it is a word of agreement, but not really. To me, anyway.

Anyway, finished nitpicking but I LOVED Arthur using his sword when Merlin pushed. Just wanted to mention that that really worked for me, and also I loved Merlin caving and confessing to Morgana. I really wanted that to happen in the episode!

[nyxelestia]

Thanks for the critiques! (Though on the note of 'yea', it's to change the pronounciation from "yah" of 'yeah' to "yeh" of 'yea' - half the people I meet say 'yea' is "yay", the other half say it's "yeh", so...*shrugs*)

And I'm glad you liked the sword bit. I wanted the confession to happen in the episode, too, so I put it in here. ^_^

[tetsubinatu]

So yeah is pronounced yah where you are. Here it starts as yeh, then elongates into an 'ah' at the end. Not quite a distinct two syllables, but more elongated than a single syllable.

And I think I've only really encountered yea when singing hymns: eg:
Yea Lord, we greet thee
Born this happy morning...
I've never heard it pronouced yeh!

I do find accents interesting. Linguistics minor, not that you'd know it.

[nyxelestia]

I'm less accents, and more into studying languages over all. You'd be surprised how many similarities there are between Old English and Latin, despite them not actually being related languages.

So, as for "yeah" vs. "yea", I'm mostly going by what I hear, in the form of the few British people here (America) I know. That yah/yeh thing is pretty much the difference I've noticed. (Then again, Valley-girls tend to pronounce "yeah" like "yaaah", so who knows, maybe my ability to hear that word is botched up from constant exposure to Vally Girl stupidity or something).

[saint4u]

I absolutely loved this ! The whole Merlin and Morgana interaction was amazing and quite believable as it would take both of them to know each other well enough to trust each other to learn magic, and by default of that by Gwen finding out by being with Morgana also makes sense and her being so accepting of it as to her being his best friend is also a stroke of genius

[nyxelestia]

I'm glad you liked the Merlin-Morgana interaction. It was a bit tough, with their personalities and ranks and whatnot to take into account, so I'm glad it came across well. (Even Gwen!)

And as for Arthur - writing out his emotions without actually having his POV was bitch to write, so I'm glad you liked it. And yay for puddle of good!

As for Euphoria (junkie!Merlin fic) it's coming along well. I've got most of the next chapter written out on paper somewhere, so as soon as I find it, I'll type it up and send it off to my beta (assuming she's not MIA by that point).

[asolyn]

brilliantly amazing story! Really cute way for Arthur to find out about Merlins powers... jealous Arthur is always the most fun.

[nyxelestia]

Jealous Arthur is fun! ^_^

[kuhekabir]

awww, excellent! :)

[nyxelestia]

Thanks. ^_^

[blaidd_drwg]

*claps madly* Wonderful! Just wonderful.
Love all the characters as you wrote them. I don't know what would be my favorite part. I loved it all. Hmm, maybe Morganna's machinations and the amusement of the castle staff (kitchen help thrusting the picnic basket upon them - ex.) and the yummy angst of Merlin/Arthur. Poor Arthur, he suffered so well. It certainly pleased this reader.

little question - did you mean shocked look on 'his' face? It might be just me, I really need to go get some sleep. :)
They both turned their heads, and Morgana waved with a smile, freezing as she noticed the shocked look on her face.

[nyxelestia]

I'm glad you liked it. The staff "helping" Merlin was fun to write.

And yes, I meant "his" face. Thanks for pointing that out!