This was SO great. I spent .. probably at least 6 hours tonight, totally immersed in this story. It was really well written, but totally plot centered too, you didn't ever let your language overpower your points, but your story was never weakened by your words either, if that makes any sense at all? Basically what I'm trying to say that it was the perfect balance between a beautifully written piece and a really fucking great story.
The plot was ... ridiculous. Normally supernatural themes would put me right off but again you didn't let that monster detail take over or overshadow anything else. It was incredibly realistic too, it wasn't too far fetched or stretched, just entirely plausible and a pure joy to read.
You handled everything so WELL. Like .. man. I know if someone gave me the bones (tehe) of this story and said 'write that!' I'd get lost, I'd fuck it up, and I think the vast majority of people would, but either you're just THAT great a writer or else this story means a lot to you, or maybe it's a combination of the two.
Every detail, the forest - the physical connotations of Frank's condition, it was all totally evoking and effective. You draw a really great picture with your words! Everything is so physical and tangible and again, beautifully rendered.
I must admit, I lost my shit a little bit (read: a fucking lot) when it came to the topic of Frank being dead. I cried for that first time Ray and the others talked about the kid who had gone missing. It was so so sad. And when Frank said that his body was in the forest, oh god. It's so .. I know I'm going to spend the next couple weeks thinking about how awful that idea is, the thought that Frank's body was in the forest the whole time, alone and .... it really got to me that Frank couldn't leave the forest too, I hated to think of him alone in the forest at night, in the dark. When he said his body was 'dumped', I was on his use of that term faster than even Gerard, I think! I was talking to my friend on IM, flailing as I read all night, and I was like "DUDE, SOMEONE KILLED FRANK. WHO WOULD DO THAT. WHO WOULD KILL *FRANK*!!!!", haha.
Speaking of which, there were some SUPER hilarious parts to this! The friendship dynamics between all the band kids, the way they immediately accepted Gerard as one of them and the way that was so obvious in how they spoke to one another was wonderful! The dialogue was gorgeous, so natural and fluid but at times so meaningful and important too.
Gerard and Mikey's relationship was lovely! Pete and Gabe and Ryan and Brendon's little cameo's were GREAT!
Beautiful words, great plot, really well drawn characters and scenarios, totally touching work. Love love love love LOVE! Thanks so much for writing and posting this! <3
OH and also, I love the fact that carrying Frank's bones meant he could leave the forest. That's such a macabre and INTERESTING and plausible detail, it's brilliant. I was so relieved and elated when he finally got to be out in the world with Gerard!
The detail of the abandoned graveyard was great too, I would totally love to know more about Sally and the other girl that was there for a while!
Also also, the sex was GREAT! Super hot and well written and so .. urgent, you know? Which is totally apt.
Frank and Gerard are really really great characters in this, I love how you wrote them individually and as a couple that work so well. I like how their relationship has kind of reached a point where at least MOST things have worked out for the best. The flow of this story was such that I think just enough was resolved, which leaves you wondering what happens to them in the future but not feeling like you ended this at the wrong point or anything. The arc of the storylines pitch a perfect circle, I think I mean!
Oh my god, ramble away, because this comment? IS SO AMAZING. Thank you so much, seriously, it just totally dissolved my heart into flail and delight that you cared enough about this story to write all this.
And yes, oh man, this story has been a really big deal to me for a long, long time -- I started writing it thinking it'd be an easy one-shot, maybe 10k, but I realized really quickly that it was a much bigger story than that, and that if I wanted to do it justice, I'd have to be in for the long haul (I admit I didn't anticipate the haul being THIS long, though, heh).
Yeah, Frank's story is really, really rough -- I'm sorry there was crying! *hugs, offers tissues* But even though it's a tragic story, I tried to give everyone a hopeful ending, even if it's not perfect. Frank's still fucked up (how could he not be?), but he's got Gerard, and freedom, and friends. And hey, speaking of which:
The flow of this story was such that I think just enough was resolved, which leaves you wondering what happens to them in the future but not feeling like you ended this at the wrong point or anything. The arc of the storylines pitch a perfect circle
*__* Best compliment ever, seriously! I wanted to give everyone an ending to build on, a future, so that comment means so much to me, I am beaming like crazy.
Just, again: thank you SO MUCH. This story has been such a huge part of me for so long, and knowing that it resonates like this with other people is the best feeling in the world. ♥
The plot was ... ridiculous. Normally supernatural themes would put me right off but again you didn't let that monster detail take over or overshadow anything else. It was incredibly realistic too, it wasn't too far fetched or stretched, just entirely plausible and a pure joy to read.
You handled everything so WELL. Like .. man. I know if someone gave me the bones (tehe) of this story and said 'write that!' I'd get lost, I'd fuck it up, and I think the vast majority of people would, but either you're just THAT great a writer or else this story means a lot to you, or maybe it's a combination of the two.
Every detail, the forest - the physical connotations of Frank's condition, it was all totally evoking and effective. You draw a really great picture with your words! Everything is so physical and tangible and again, beautifully rendered.
I must admit, I lost my shit a little bit (read: a fucking lot) when it came to the topic of Frank being dead. I cried for that first time Ray and the others talked about the kid who had gone missing. It was so so sad. And when Frank said that his body was in the forest, oh god. It's so .. I know I'm going to spend the next couple weeks thinking about how awful that idea is, the thought that Frank's body was in the forest the whole time, alone and .... it really got to me that Frank couldn't leave the forest too, I hated to think of him alone in the forest at night, in the dark. When he said his body was 'dumped', I was on his use of that term faster than even Gerard, I think! I was talking to my friend on IM, flailing as I read all night, and I was like "DUDE, SOMEONE KILLED FRANK. WHO WOULD DO THAT. WHO WOULD KILL *FRANK*!!!!", haha.
Speaking of which, there were some SUPER hilarious parts to this! The friendship dynamics between all the band kids, the way they immediately accepted Gerard as one of them and the way that was so obvious in how they spoke to one another was wonderful! The dialogue was gorgeous, so natural and fluid but at times so meaningful and important too.
Gerard and Mikey's relationship was lovely! Pete and Gabe and Ryan and Brendon's little cameo's were GREAT!
Beautiful words, great plot, really well drawn characters and scenarios, totally touching work. Love love love love LOVE! Thanks so much for writing and posting this! <3
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The detail of the abandoned graveyard was great too, I would totally love to know more about Sally and the other girl that was there for a while!
Also also, the sex was GREAT! Super hot and well written and so .. urgent, you know? Which is totally apt.
Frank and Gerard are really really great characters in this, I love how you wrote them individually and as a couple that work so well. I like how their relationship has kind of reached a point where at least MOST things have worked out for the best. The flow of this story was such that I think just enough was resolved, which leaves you wondering what happens to them in the future but not feeling like you ended this at the wrong point or anything. The arc of the storylines pitch a perfect circle, I think I mean!
Sorry for rambling like a motherfucker!
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And yes, oh man, this story has been a really big deal to me for a long, long time -- I started writing it thinking it'd be an easy one-shot, maybe 10k, but I realized really quickly that it was a much bigger story than that, and that if I wanted to do it justice, I'd have to be in for the long haul (I admit I didn't anticipate the haul being THIS long, though, heh).
Yeah, Frank's story is really, really rough -- I'm sorry there was crying! *hugs, offers tissues* But even though it's a tragic story, I tried to give everyone a hopeful ending, even if it's not perfect. Frank's still fucked up (how could he not be?), but he's got Gerard, and freedom, and friends. And hey, speaking of which:
The flow of this story was such that I think just enough was resolved, which leaves you wondering what happens to them in the future but not feeling like you ended this at the wrong point or anything. The arc of the storylines pitch a perfect circle
*__* Best compliment ever, seriously! I wanted to give everyone an ending to build on, a future, so that comment means so much to me, I am beaming like crazy.
Just, again: thank you SO MUCH. This story has been such a huge part of me for so long, and knowing that it resonates like this with other people is the best feeling in the world. ♥
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