Time Cannot Mend, Part 3

[artemismuse]

Teammates:

They are on the same side for a matter of five minutes or so. In the rowboat sharing a grimace at the idiocy that is Pintel and Ragetti, they look to each other for confirmation and are shocked to discover they are thinking the exact same thing. James looks away first with a wry twist of lips, and then the stupid pirates do it again and

Comments

[sword01]

I really, really, reallyreallyreally like your writing. Especially your ability to let (I'm assuming) a warped sense of humor seep into James and Lizzy. Love "Teammates" and the line:

“I missed this,” she murmurs confidentially.
“What, the pirates? Or me?”
“Either. Both. Take your pick.”

And of course "Lovers" was also a fav. I look forward to more!

[june7rose]

I adore the squeezing of tushies. Great job, as usual, but you knew that. :)

[cal_reflector]

The nuggets are variously nostalgic and sweet; ironic and amused; no longer innocent but attracted; and longing for what might have been. They are very good. Have you written whole stories before?

[commodore_lydia]

I love the sort of broken nostalgia or bittersweetness that you convey in these: "Family" (Promise me, James, that I'll always have you and Father. Don't ever leave me.) and "Children" ache with that gap between them. Predictably, I loved "Lovers" and "Birth" (With all the irony of the situation) made me giggle.

Fantastic work!

[flyingpigs_live]

Awesome job! I love "Lovers" and "Children" the most. "Family" is so bittersweet! Can't wait for the rest. :)

[emaline5678]

Simply brilliant again. I loved "Friends" and "Lovers". I just love that you're able to express so much of Norribeth in a few sentences. They feel like little snapshots of emotion and I just love to read them. Keep up the good work!