This is awesome! I can't wait to read part two :D I already love all the variations of the day - Brad at the party with Nate's nieces was just too cute :) And I absolutely adore how IC you have everyone, and Brad's phone call to Ray is just hilarious.
Retain freedom of maneuver. Orient on the threat.
Oh, Brad ♥
Two little things:
Where it says Sarah, however, seems nonplussed and she nods as if ‘Brad’ explained everything.
Nonplussed actually means confused or bewildered, so I'm not sure if you're using that in the way you mean to.
Also Sofia Coppola is spelled with an f and a double p, only one l.
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Retain freedom of maneuver. Orient on the threat.
Oh, Brad ♥
Two little things:
Where it says Sarah, however, seems nonplussed and she nods as if ‘Brad’ explained everything.
Nonplussed actually means confused or bewildered, so I'm not sure if you're using that in the way you mean to.
Also Sofia Coppola is spelled with an f and a double p, only one l.
Off to read part two!
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I'm so glad you liked it anyway :)
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I'm too sleepy to read right now, so I'm going to do it tomorrow, but yay :D
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