Comments | nixa_jane: Alias: The Players (PG-13), Rachel/Sark.

laytoncolt in nixa_jane

Alias: The Players (PG-13), Rachel/Sark.

Jan 30, 2007 20:29

The problem with Sark is that he makes you believe you're friends.

( the players )

rachel/sark, alias

Comments 10

muzivitch January 31 2007, 04:52:37 UTC

Oh, I like this. I like the idea that he wasn't that interested in Lydia, but that Rachel is fascinating. :)

laytoncolt February 1 2007, 02:54:03 UTC

Thank you! :-)

gekidasa January 31 2007, 05:07:46 UTC

Yay, Sarkchel! This was fun to read, and it reminds me how much I would have liked to see where they eventually went with their relationship.

laytoncolt February 1 2007, 02:55:32 UTC

Thank you! :-)

intrikate88 January 31 2007, 23:33:08 UTC

Ah, that was beautiful. You characterized Sark so deliciously and caught Rachel's thoughts and actions so very well.

laytoncolt February 1 2007, 02:56:38 UTC

Thank you! :-)

vaznetti February 1 2007, 02:38:20 UTC

You look up at the vent in the ceiling and decide to be the challenge he wants.

Awesome ending to a very nice story. I love their interaction here.

laytoncolt February 1 2007, 02:57:20 UTC

Thank you! :-)

jcalanthe February 2 2007, 03:18:10 UTC

This is really fun! The second person voice worked for me too, which surprised me. I too like that Rachel is fascinating while Lydia was dull (and thank you for the Lydia & Bob line just after that, cuz I could not figure out who Lydia was...).

laytoncolt February 3 2007, 08:46:14 UTC

Thank you! I don't usually use second person, pretty much never, actually, but I kind of just started writing it that way and figured I'd see it through. I'm glad that it worked for you! :-)