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nirix5
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May 08, 2003 20:31
Feedback is my friend. Original short story. Yeehah.
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Same thing everyone else wants.
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fiction
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jubei26
May 8 2003, 18:07:47 UTC
Wow....That's really good. I like it. Just a note... is this a Typo?
"I’m a lot more aware of the gun in her and then of the way her low-rise jeans cover her ass."
Should it be " the gun in her hand and then..."
Anyways it's a good story.
Tito
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nirix5
May 8 2003, 18:36:11 UTC
Yeah. That was supposed to be fixed but there were some updating problems. Thanks for pointing that out, I'll go fix it.
Glad you liked it :)
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jubei26
May 8 2003, 19:28:21 UTC
Of course, "Sex personified" sounds like she should have Hazel Eyes, and a Feather Tatoo...but then a Feather doesn't cut like a knife....or does she....
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nirix5
May 8 2003, 20:05:40 UTC
She can, when it suits her.
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saccarineayako
May 9 2003, 07:20:23 UTC
I LIKE! whee. :D
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nirix5
May 9 2003, 07:33:06 UTC
HUZZAH!!! :D
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"I’m a lot more aware of the gun in her and then of the way her low-rise jeans cover her ass."
Should it be " the gun in her hand and then..."
Anyways it's a good story.
Tito
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Glad you liked it :)
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