Comments | nirix5: What do you want?

nirix5

What do you want?

May 08, 2003 20:31

Feedback is my friend. Original short story. Yeehah.

( Same thing everyone else wants. )

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jubei26 May 8 2003, 18:07:47 UTC

Wow....That's really good. I like it. Just a note... is this a Typo?

"I’m a lot more aware of the gun in her and then of the way her low-rise jeans cover her ass."

Should it be " the gun in her hand and then..."

Anyways it's a good story.

Tito

Re: nirix5 May 8 2003, 18:36:11 UTC

Yeah. That was supposed to be fixed but there were some updating problems. Thanks for pointing that out, I'll go fix it.

Glad you liked it :)

jubei26 May 8 2003, 19:28:21 UTC

Of course, "Sex personified" sounds like she should have Hazel Eyes, and a Feather Tatoo...but then a Feather doesn't cut like a knife....or does she....

Re: nirix5 May 8 2003, 20:05:40 UTC

She can, when it suits her.

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saccarineayako May 9 2003, 07:20:23 UTC

I LIKE! whee. :D

Re: nirix5 May 9 2003, 07:33:06 UTC

HUZZAH!!! :D