Wonderful poetrywillepic_72February 17 2009, 04:06:51 UTC
Hi Nikita, Your poem... Love says... is VERY BEAUTIFUL!!!! I sent two sonnets to your other posting. They were created from the Mahabharata. Arjuna comes into his first scene in very dramatic way. The girl is supposed to be important, but there are no details. I made her a lot more important by adding details. Maybe I did this , in part, because of your enthusiasm. Things happen for the best! Over the weekend, I worked on translations of other sections. I had a very good weekend! I added many new poems. The introduction to the Mahabhatara is very wordy, and the reference translation I use is very dry. Although famous, it looks engineered, like a rocket scientist audience might be waiting to read the thing. Well, my poetic mind told me I could do better. So I worked really hard, like 12 hours on Saturday, and I am very happy with the results. It was inspirational to hear from you. Encouragement among authors and artists is always loved. Mahabharata is a most famous Epic, worldwide. Though I am writing my own Epics, my style could be used to tell any story. So, I am trying my sonnet-writing style on sections of your Adi Parva. Things happen for the best. You posted on a Pun_princess page. I liked her library log very much. That led to my contacting you. Ah, girls for books. The writer's dream. You have amply demonstrated the power of poetry to express deep emotion. Love your poem in this post! Poetry also concentrates ideas. I write mainly story poems. The sonnet below is the very first in my series. It uses key phrases from the very wordy English translation. (The Mahabharata of Krishna-Dwaipayana Vyasa. English Prose Translation, by Kisari Mohan Ganguli, Calcutta) The Parvas of the Adi Parva are written down as though they were being told to us by a person. This person is “Sauti.” Here is sonnet 1.
THE MAHABHARATA (ADI PARVA) Epic Poetry by William E. Barnett (willepic_72)
SECTION I
1 Humble Sauti visits Munis Sages. With calm palms joined, he salutes them, saying, “I hope all my answers are persuasive and show some rapport with thoughtful living. “Drawn to visit sacred waters and loved holy shrines, I journeyed to the country honored by the twice-born. There great battles raged where Kuru clans fought Pandu offspring. “Armed with sacred stories they love, can I tell how they view real religious duty and true worldly profit? Want to hear wise news on Sovereigns that know mankind truly? “Loving Brahma, you deserve news shining with the splendor of a solar dawning!”
So, Miss Sunshine, would you like to see sonnet 2? (Hint. Don't say no. Things happen for the best.)
Your poem... Love says... is VERY BEAUTIFUL!!!!
I sent two sonnets to your other posting. They were created from the Mahabharata. Arjuna comes into his first scene in very dramatic way. The girl is supposed to be important, but there are no details. I made her a lot more important by adding details. Maybe I did this , in part, because of your enthusiasm. Things happen for the best!
Over the weekend, I worked on translations of other sections. I had a very good weekend! I added many new poems.
The introduction to the Mahabhatara is very wordy, and the reference translation I use is very dry.
Although famous, it looks engineered, like a rocket scientist audience might be waiting to read the thing. Well, my poetic mind told me I could do better. So I worked really hard, like 12 hours on Saturday, and I am very happy with the results. It was inspirational to hear from you. Encouragement among authors and artists is always loved.
Mahabharata is a most famous Epic, worldwide. Though I am writing my own Epics, my style could be used to tell any story. So, I am trying my sonnet-writing style on sections of your Adi Parva.
Things happen for the best. You posted on a Pun_princess page. I liked her library log very much. That led to my contacting you. Ah, girls for books. The writer's dream.
You have amply demonstrated the power of poetry to express deep emotion. Love your poem in this post! Poetry also concentrates ideas. I write mainly story poems.
The sonnet below is the very first in my series. It uses key phrases from the very wordy English translation. (The Mahabharata of Krishna-Dwaipayana Vyasa. English Prose Translation, by Kisari Mohan Ganguli, Calcutta)
The Parvas of the Adi Parva are written down as though they were being told to us by a person. This person is “Sauti.” Here is sonnet 1.
THE MAHABHARATA
(ADI PARVA)
Epic Poetry by William E. Barnett (willepic_72)
SECTION I
1 Humble Sauti visits Munis Sages.
With calm palms joined, he salutes them, saying,
“I hope all my answers are persuasive
and show some rapport with thoughtful living.
“Drawn to visit sacred waters and loved
holy shrines, I journeyed to the country
honored by the twice-born. There great battles
raged where Kuru clans fought Pandu offspring.
“Armed with sacred stories they love, can I
tell how they view real religious duty
and true worldly profit? Want to hear wise
news on Sovereigns that know mankind truly?
“Loving Brahma, you deserve news shining
with the splendor of a solar dawning!”
So, Miss Sunshine, would you like to see sonnet 2?
(Hint. Don't say no. Things happen for the best.)
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