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Sweet Talk 101 END

Jan 17, 2011 20:10

Title: Sweet Talk 101 (4/4)
Author: Alsike
Fandom: X-Men/Criminal Minds, with a slight Glee (or at least Ryan Murphy) fusion.
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Emma/Sebastian, Emily/JJ, Emma/Emily
Word Count: 5106 (of 18,500)
Apologies: Sorry! This took me forever to get around to filling in the holes, and I didn't proof after I was done, so I'm sorry! But yay ( Read more... )

criminal minds, nc-17, x-men, au, emma/emily

Comments 10

precious_sin January 18 2011, 02:38:35 UTC

Oh. This was AWESOME. The whole thing. But especially the part with Emily in the red dress, I'm a sucker for short red dresses.

scoutnabout January 18 2011, 03:21:41 UTC

From red dress on you really had my attention. The hard fuck was nice too;
honestly I had a hard time following Emily's emotions and Emma's reasoning about the porn, Sebastion, and what Emma was doing with the photos of Emily and thinking. I also am not sure who left the photos of Emma in Emily's locker, either Sebastian for some weird reason, JJ would make sense, or was it Emma to test Emily's 'affection' for her? I'm confused.
Great ending though; very "Cruel Intentions" kind of moment in some ways.

lexus_grey March 20 2011, 05:50:41 UTC

Hey, I'm not the author, but I see you didn't get an answer to your questions and I understood what she was going for.

Sebastian put the photos in Emily's locker. His intent was to humiliate Emma by making her porn videos public knowledge around the school, and specifically to make Emily disgusted with Emma. He didn't want Emma to win their bet, so he did what he thought would make Emily run away. He thought if Emily knew about the porn videos, then there was no way she would ever let Emma fuck her. Then Emma couldn't win the bet.

mayireadtoday January 18 2011, 04:16:05 UTC

I hurt for Emma so much: “No one’s ever fucked me. I’ve been someone else for everyone I’ve slept with.”

I loved the last scene.

kith_koby January 18 2011, 07:28:56 UTC

There is no more amazing version of the bet than this. I really like dhow we learned about Emma's personality, and her reasons for doing what she was doing and wanting Emily. And when Emily came in, in a short red dress... one's mind explodes. Fucking in the cafteria in front of everybody, and the principal being so cool about it, and Emma bullshitting Seb... Fucking Awesome (and yes, fucking is really not that descriptive of an adjective... you should write a fic where teacher Emma gets to say that).

WOW!!! miyuve January 19 2011, 01:23:11 UTC

I feel like a horny teenager again (Emily fucking Emma and viceversa with Emily using a red dress, you want to kill me!!), and to make it worse I got caught...LOL

Thou I never saw this ending coming (like this), all I can say is that you always surprise me, and I believe that is why you are one of my favorites author...BRAVO!!

By the way, how is your novel comming along?...