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nike_ravus

Fake Empire 8

Dec 18, 2009 09:33

Title: Fake Empire 8 (JJ goes off the deep end)
Author: Alsike
Rating: PG-13
Fandom: X-Men/Criminal Minds
Pairing: Emma Frost/Emily Prentiss, other Emma Frost/Emily Prentiss
Disclaimer: I do not own X-Men or Criminal Minds. I owe ( Read more... )

didi, criminal minds, fake empire, x-men, emma/emily

Comments 13

rebelbyrdie December 18 2009, 19:07:23 UTC

Good grief. Emily spent the entire day with JJ and JJ was like THAT? It's like attack of the soccer mom on speed.

"What she ought rather then what she wants to do"
Yeah, that sounds like Emma, and Sage would know.

This was a really great chapter. Didi was just too cute.

Oh I think Emily just broke JJ's brain.

Spectacular stuff!

elemental_light December 18 2009, 23:38:55 UTC

To me it doesn't seem particularly disjointed; it is following a timeline quite closely, even if the sections are tonally different. Although I think that bringing up that JJ was Didi's personal slave might have made an excellent endpoint!

I find it a bit strange that Emily is quite together when in X-man land (at least with handling the X-men), but then completely useless back home.

I also thought that the "She does what she ought rather than what she wants to do" bits were ... bittersweet, especially that Emily chose not to call Emma out on it, by phoning up.

Incidentally, there's a small typo on the 'She' after "Well?" near the beginning.

nike_ravus December 20 2009, 15:52:13 UTC

Good catch. And I would totally fix it, if LJ wasn't going to completely destroy my formatting. *cries*

I think it's easier for her to seem in control with the X-Men because they're not supposed to be 'friends' (Ro is different, but she sort of wimps out around her too.) so she can treat them like a challenge, which is when she's at her best.

If JJ wasn't her friend she would have just kicked her out.

heart1e55m00mba December 19 2009, 02:00:51 UTC

I don't think it came across as disjointed. Having JJ be in uber soccer mom mode was a little strange, but I got used to it. The ending was fantastic.

authorw December 19 2009, 02:44:59 UTC

Emily was funny when she told Didi to brush her teeth!
JJ is bossy, just taking charge.
How dare she take Emily's wine.

scoutnabout December 19 2009, 06:38:37 UTC

Mmmhm, thanks for posting :) Sage was a nice surprise, will she be showing up some more in the story? Are you going to mix in some competition for Emily's attention? That's always hot (hint, hint ;) Please keep writing, I really like this one.

nike_ravus December 20 2009, 15:55:21 UTC

A bit more Sage might be fun, but I really don't think she's interested in Emily at all. They're too much alike in an odd way. (If anyone, I think Sage would have a thing for Garcia!)

:D