Comments | nightwritey: Working Title: For Science!

nightwritey

Working Title: For Science!

May 16, 2010 21:46

It wasn’t at all unusual that Wheeljack’s lab was pitch-black but for the faint phosphorescent glow of a computer’s screen off in one corner. Ratchet had expected it to be that way. So much so that, as he’d entered his passcode into the door’s control panel with one hand while balancing a tray bearing energon against his hip with the other, he was ( Read more... )

wheeljack, rated pg, unfinished snippets, ratchet

Comments 6

Do it FOR SCIENCE, Wheeljack! jalaperilo May 17 2010, 19:05:21 UTC

I can’t give you any coherent feedback! I’m falling in love with these two all over again. “Must keep up appearances, after all” Lol, don’t worry Ratchet, your lovely gooey centre of niceness is our little secret ( ... )

Re: Do it FOR SCIENCE, Wheeljack! nightwind69 May 18 2010, 00:13:13 UTC

Good point about mixing light and serious. And I agree, too. IMO, all "heavier" stories need some comic relief here and there, and I'm generally not a fan of straight slapstick without a bit of seriousness sprinkled in. But on the other hand, if there's too much flipping back and forth, or if the flipping is too jarring without a proper amount of transition, I think it can be confusing for the reader. Especially in a shorter story...which I THINK this is going to be, although, annoyingly, it keeps growing. I THINK it's going to be three fairly long sections/chapters, but who the hell knows? One day, I swear to God, I WILL learn how to write something short. *sigh*

In this opening, I was consciously trying to take Ratchet from a "la-dee-dah Wheeljack's nuts again" place to a more "OMFG, Wheeljack's nuts, and he's gonna take me down with him!" kind of place, so I'm glad that showed through. Slippery slope, indeed ( ... )

poptartodoom May 17 2010, 23:25:29 UTC

FOR SCIENCE!

Oh, Wheeljack, I love you so very much. You are my patron saint of Wacky Hijinks and Boom. I'm totally loving this, and his relationship with Ratchet- they're totally adorable as either BFFs or OTPs- is absolutely perfect. ^_^ I can't wait to see the rest of this!

poptartodoom May 17 2010, 23:26:54 UTC

(And FYI, in case you didn't know, they ARE my OTP, so... yeah. ;) All of their interactions are played through my built-in OTP slash filter. Squee. <3

nightwind69 May 18 2010, 00:16:40 UTC

Jack and Ratch are fun paired together whatever the context or kind of relationship you put them in. And their relationship has interesting possibilities that I get to exploit explore in this story, so...yeah.

Glad you liked this bit. I hope to have it officially posted somewhat soon. My post-sick groove has been kind of sporadic, but I'm working on it. :)

velvetg May 18 2010, 23:49:57 UTC

Bad Nightwind. Hook me in then leave me hanging.

Love it. I particularly like the idea that the Dinobots were supposed to be drones, which helps explain why they're treated so badly.

No particular literary critiques from me, possibly because I'm not really in a critiquing state of alertness, but nothing leapt out at me either, so that's a good thing!