Lost and Found (Out): Part 2

[nightsfiction]

Title: Lost and Found (Out): Part 2
Pairing: Patrick Stump/Pete Wentz (Peterick)
Rating: NC-17 (for sexual content).
Summary: Patrick has been in love with his best friend for almost as long as he's known him. So when Pete starts hooking up with strangers frequently, he's far from happy about it. Will Patrick's jealousy force him to be honest about

Comments

[darkangel_0410]

Ok, I really liked this! I'm usually not fond of first person POVs, but it just worked here.

Your Pete characterization was spot on for me, always pushing against whatever boundry or line he comes across, always wanting more and more, pressing whatever buttons he finds in the process. He can't help himself, it seems like, you know? And while I don't write Patrick the way you did here, it rings true to me, too -especially back in '05.

And the smut melted my brain, I loved it.

In closing, this was awesome, I loved it and i really hope you plan on writing more.

[nightsfiction]

Thank you! I usually don't write in first person either but for some reason this just came out that way and I left it because when I experimented with changing a few lines it seemed to lose a bit of intensity.

I'm so glad you liked Pete! I wasn't sure how well I was writing him here! My Patrick in this series is based on my Patrick in a rp and he's very repressed in a lot of ways. There's a complicated back story behind that.

I'm happy you liked the smut too, it's what I was most worried wouldn't turn out well, lol. This was my first time writing smut alone and not just in roleplays so it was somewhat challenging.

I probably won't write this Patrick much more in any fan fics but I have a possible chaptered Pete/Patrick story idea in my head. I will have to see if I find the time to write it and work out the logistics of it! That Patrick ends up being cast in a more dominant role whether he likes it or not and it's set during FOB's hiatus. So we'll see!

I really appreciate your thoughtful comment! It made my night!

[darkangel_0410]

Writing smut is still a pain in the ass for me, tbh -I'm always worried about it coming across too clinical or girly, etc. I usually end up giving it a once ilover when I'm done with it to check spelling and then I leave it alone, otherwise i'd be there all night messing around with it.

I don't know much of rp, so I know even less about adapting it for a fic, but I think you did a good job with it here.

Ooohhh, a chaptered fic *grabby hands* I'll definitely keep an eye out for that since Dominant!Patrick is one of my all time favorites, lol.

Your welcome :D

[dearkendall]

Perfect, as usual! Sometimes your imagery, both in this and the rp, make me have to read lines over and over again, and gives me good little shudders.