"Secrets" is a fic heartbreaker, you know. ; ) Also, I <3 you.aefallenJanuary 5 2005, 20:04:07 UTC
“Don’t tell Harry”
-he agreed.
I don't think Harry'd want to share. OMG wrong pairing. XD
It would be forgotten soon enough, this short fling of theirs. *cries*
But they each never forgot and Peter surmised this from the tiny things Norman did. The lingering hand on his shoulder, the side glances, the way they’d look at each other. This I love. I love the way that what they share goes beyond the physical. I love the subtle ways Norman reveals that he still feels for Peter. Forgive me, I thought hard and that was still the least sappy way I could put it... *dies*
There would be no guilt in their little secret, because it only happened once and they both had chosen to move on. *cries again*
I love the way this ties in with the title. I always think titles should be chosen for a reason, that they should relate in some way to what happens in the fic. I wish I could do it better. You chose well. There's an art to selecting fic titles, I think, that isn't an easy one to learn. A title's got to capture the core of the fic. It's got to make a reader want to know more. (Heh, especially for a title like Secrets, don't you think?) I think you did it well. ^_^
in torn red and blues I liked your refreshing choice of words. I like the fact that you didn't use the words "costume", or "Spider-man suit". You chose the words that let us know exactly what you meant, words I've never seen anyone use before.
who was moments away from his last breath. *Secrets breaks aefallen's heart for the nth time*
There was only a flicker of the Norman Osborn he used to know, the same one who held him in his arms many, many months ago.
*Secrets breaks aefallen's heart for the (n + 1 )th time*
The way you wrote of the real Norman returning, and the way you write of what they had - the same one who held him in his arms many, many months ago - you don't say it in so many words, but the readers remember, and somehow held him in his arms is such a lovely, tender, perfect moment in Peter's memory. It brings such a beautiful image to mind, somehow, for me. And your decision to use it now, after their fight, as Norman's dying, is heartwrenching, as well as a fabulous contrast.
-he agreed.
I don't think Harry'd want to share. OMG wrong pairing. XD
It would be forgotten soon enough, this short fling of theirs.
*cries*
But they each never forgot and Peter surmised this from the tiny things Norman did. The lingering hand on his shoulder, the side glances, the way they’d look at each other.
This I love. I love the way that what they share goes beyond the physical. I love the subtle ways Norman reveals that he still feels for Peter. Forgive me, I thought hard and that was still the least sappy way I could put it... *dies*
There would be no guilt in their little secret, because it only happened once and they both had chosen to move on.
*cries again*
I love the way this ties in with the title. I always think titles should be chosen for a reason, that they should relate in some way to what happens in the fic. I wish I could do it better. You chose well. There's an art to selecting fic titles, I think, that isn't an easy one to learn. A title's got to capture the core of the fic. It's got to make a reader want to know more. (Heh, especially for a title like Secrets, don't you think?) I think you did it well. ^_^
in torn red and blues
I liked your refreshing choice of words. I like the fact that you didn't use the words "costume", or "Spider-man suit". You chose the words that let us know exactly what you meant, words I've never seen anyone use before.
who was moments away from his last breath.
*Secrets breaks aefallen's heart for the nth time*
There was only a flicker of the Norman Osborn he used to know, the same one who held him in his arms many, many months ago.
*Secrets breaks aefallen's heart for the (n + 1 )th time*
The way you wrote of the real Norman returning, and the way you write of what they had - the same one who held him in his arms many, many months ago - you don't say it in so many words, but the readers remember, and somehow held him in his arms is such a lovely, tender, perfect moment in Peter's memory. It brings such a beautiful image to mind, somehow, for me. And your decision to use it now, after their fight, as Norman's dying, is heartwrenching, as well as a fabulous contrast.
*cries at your fic*
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