Thanks for postingcrowley_galMarch 4 2011, 00:42:44 UTC
I've been looking forward to reading the 2nd arc of this story. It did not disappoint.
It felt so real. It had to be so embarrassing and tough for Sam to do Dean's personal care and equally hard and embarrassing for Dean to have Sam do it.
Sam's clinical detachment is probably the only way he can get through it, so I understand why he's doing it. Put I also understand why Dean feels he's being treated like an anatomy dummy.
The line about being a caregiver changing the relationship is so true.
Sam being jealous of Milla and her easy going relationship with Dean is also very understandable. Milla doesn't have to worry about Dean's personal care and while she does help, she has the benefit of not being related.
Sam and Dean are both in a really tough spot and you have to feel for both of them.
I think it speaks volumes about your writing ability at how sympathetic Sam comes across here. It would be very easy for him to seem selfish for being upset with what Dean said to him, yet I didn't feel that at all. I felt sorry for him because he's desperate, scared and wants to be their for Dean but is unsure of this dynamic.
The same with Dean feeling bad that he stood up for himself. You're heart just breaks for both of them.
I'm adder574 over at fanfic.net. I usually comment over there but I'm not sure if your planning to post there or not, and I wanted to let you know that I'm still following your story.
The only thing I wish is that you had more time to write. I look forward to the next part.
Re: Thanks for postingneonchicaMarch 4 2011, 01:10:43 UTC
Thank you so much for your long & detailed comment. It truly makes a difference to get specific reactions to my writing! And thanks for continuing to stick with the story despite my molasses slow update time. I'm so glad I've managed to make sympathetic characters out of both Dean and Sam. I've been struggling with the Sam aspect of it for a while now - not the whole reason, but a large reason why I've been so slow to update. Sam needs to wear-out his welcome in order for the rest of the story to take place as planned, and I've been struggling to make him an ass without TRULY being an ass. Wish me luck! One thing I can tell you is that there is a lot more of the stress and forced interaction before we get to a happy point between the two. Hope that's ok! As far as ff.net is concerned, I havent' quite decided whether to post there or not. With all the new adds and spamming they've been doing over there lately I'm not liking the site. Thinking I will just pull all my stuff over here and abandon ff.net. We'll see. Thanks for reading, though! and thanks for hopping over here to review!
It felt so real. It had to be so embarrassing and tough for Sam to do Dean's personal care and equally hard and embarrassing for Dean to have Sam do it.
Sam's clinical detachment is probably the only way he can get through it, so I understand why he's doing it. Put I also understand why Dean feels he's being treated like an anatomy dummy.
The line about being a caregiver changing the relationship is so true.
Sam being jealous of Milla and her easy going relationship with Dean is also very understandable. Milla doesn't have to worry about Dean's personal care and while she does help, she has the benefit of not being related.
Sam and Dean are both in a really tough spot and you have to feel for both of them.
I think it speaks volumes about your writing ability at how sympathetic Sam comes across here. It would be very easy for him to seem selfish for being upset with what Dean said to him, yet I didn't feel that at all. I felt sorry for him because he's desperate, scared and wants to be their for Dean but is unsure of this dynamic.
The same with Dean feeling bad that he stood up for himself. You're heart just breaks for both of them.
I'm adder574 over at fanfic.net. I usually comment over there but I'm not sure if your planning to post there or not, and I wanted to let you know that I'm still following your story.
The only thing I wish is that you had more time to write. I look forward to the next part.
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I'm so glad I've managed to make sympathetic characters out of both Dean and Sam. I've been struggling with the Sam aspect of it for a while now - not the whole reason, but a large reason why I've been so slow to update. Sam needs to wear-out his welcome in order for the rest of the story to take place as planned, and I've been struggling to make him an ass without TRULY being an ass. Wish me luck!
One thing I can tell you is that there is a lot more of the stress and forced interaction before we get to a happy point between the two. Hope that's ok!
As far as ff.net is concerned, I havent' quite decided whether to post there or not. With all the new adds and spamming they've been doing over there lately I'm not liking the site. Thinking I will just pull all my stuff over here and abandon ff.net. We'll see.
Thanks for reading, though! and thanks for hopping over here to review!
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