Shadows Fic "Precipice of Darkness ch4"

[nekojita]

Hmm, it's a new season so I guess that means it's time for a fic post. New chapter of Shadows is up on the catsdream site - Precipice of Darkness ch4. Despite work and RL being a wee bit hectic, this part of the fic is FINALLY done. Not worksafe, some lines I'm rather proud of in here, and oh crap now I have to start working on ch5, don't I? *sighs

Comments

[tirwolf]

Glad to see another installment of the Shadows 'verse. Yes, I am getting impatient for some more action sequences and it seems as if one is now brewing. I really wanted to scream when you cut the scene where Omi starts to tell Keiko that he didn't give her his real name though. It would have been entertaining to see the scene play out if only for a few lines of Omi introducing himself and Keiko reacting.

The same thing happened when Omi and Nagi entered Botan's office to stop the Estet wizard. The wheels in Takashi's head were turning taking in everything around him creating the, "Holy shit!" build up and then the scene just ended. I know that they were in the middle of an emergency and time was short. In the next chapter though it could have started off as you had it with Omi reflecting on the changes in Takashi's behavior now that he knew Omi's and Nagi's true identities, cue fashback to the actual conversation, jump forward to the present.
It would have been fun to see how that conversation played out. Just a thought. Hoping for some good suspense and action soon. Thanks for continuing the story line.

[nekojita]

LOL, I guess that was an evil cut, but I didn't want to spoil too much of that conversation. Why Omi's there is going to play out later in the fic, I just didn't want to tip my hand too much with where he's going with his plotting. Sorry you get to miss out on Keiko's reaction!

[tirwolf]

Well even just the few lines of telling who he is and getting her reaction could have cut away without tipping any more of his motive for the visit or the plot. I have always been the type who likes to see how the things play out rather than wondering if she was shocked, or if she may have suspected something like, "Yes, I know who you are" and cut. Now we have a new cliff hanger. Ah, well, maybe you'll fill us in on it later.