Kaicho One shot

May 03, 2009 17:00

Hihi! My first try on writing a fanfic! Was bored at work and the typing away-while-idling-for-time-till-knocking off actually made me produce a 3 pages long shot! XD
Have fun!

One shot

Misaki stormed back to the back alley of Maid Latte, throwing the bag of trash into the trashbin.

The weather was chilling and looks like its going to snow soon.
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xmirage May 3 2009, 12:55:10 UTC
I think it's Satsuki :D

Nice plot xD similar to that time Misaki had a fever and the 3 idiots found out her job xDD

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yourplainjane May 8 2009, 16:35:30 UTC
I think Misaki being sick and Usui being worried about it is really cute. :) Well I thought your fanfic was adorable. :)

However, there were some problems with the tenses and a few missing prepositions. And uh some things here confused me a bit. Well Misaki's thoughts kinda confused me~ Hmm... I think you should've distinguished Misaki's (or everyone else's thoughts for that matter) thoughts from the other parts of the story. Let's say, why not italicize Misaki's thoughts so that the readers don't get confused. ^^

You did well on your first ever fic, and without a beta too!

Hehe I remember my first fanfic - it sucked.

Anyway, keep making more, k? I don't see a lot of Kaichou wa Maid-sama fics~ :)

PS. Maid Latte's boss' name is Satsuki. :)

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frndshiponfire May 11 2009, 17:46:50 UTC
really adorable! :D

very very sweet plot. great job!

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