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One last Make Up Sue, this time a sister. There are actually three, but one is focused on more than the others. So, here we go :3 Man, I wish I had more interesting things to say up here.
Story Title: Catch me if you can Author’s capitalization. And, man, that used to be a pretty cute pokemon song…
Culprit: BlackCrystleOfNight Looking at her nice repertoire of stories, I have a feeling we’ll be seeing her on repeat offender week… 96-95 sues from now.
Summary: Maye is a young beautiful girl who has a past that wasnot a thing she neverwanted... Maya,herolder brother, and hertwo young sisters live within Hidden Village of Leaf... She stronger then her older brother who is even Jounin... chapter 6 now out... But have yet to see any character’s by these names.
Rating: Two Kunai- A Headbang Because I had the phantom feeling of banging my head on my desk while reading this <3
Full Name(s): Keiko With two bonus twin sister sues, but I’m not worried about them.
Species: Siblingus Sueis
Hair: ‘The first had silver long hair that covering her left eye’
Eyes: ‘but her right eye was black as coal’ Which kind of reminds me of the chairman from Genshiken… who was totally terrifying.
Markings: Ah, none so far.
Possessions: Neji’s balls in a jar, clothing that looks like an odd mixture of Kaka-sensei’s and Naruto’s stuff, oh, and a CD player.
Origin: I dunno…
Special Connections to Canon: claims to be related to one… although by the end of one chapter ends up making the stupid typo of his name. my poor kaka-sensei.
Speshul Abilities: I dunno
Personal Rants Now, I might be bias because I love Kakashi and will terminated anything that tries to fuck around with him, but this was just… awful. Paragraphs of doom, capital letter of PURE AND OUTRIGHT ANGER, lousy random misspellings, but I only gave it two kunai because what I skimmed of the characters in the beginning seemed in character. I don’t think I could say the same for poor Neji-kun.
Why do I have the strange feeling that either… this kid REALLY can’t spell or stay in the same tense, or english isn’t her first language…
“Okay… Um… Please introduce yourselves. “Umino Iruka asked them. The twins nod yes. “HELLO! I am Lilly and this is my sister Milly!” The girl with the hair down said loud really loudly. Nothing came out the silver haired girl’s mouth. “Who are you sweetie?” Iruka asked with a sweat drop. Still Nothing came out of her mouth but her music got louder. “Big Sis! Our new teacher wants to know your name!” Lilly screams at their sister. The silver haired girl look at her little sister with what did you say look. “I SAID THE TEACHER WANTS TO KNOW YOUR NAME!” Milly screams at her big sister. “oh okay my name is Keiko.” The silver haired girl said. ‘She doesn’t even look strong! She look just like Sasake… Cool and calm…It makes me sick!’ Naruto thought to himself. “Okay Keiko… I see you have the top grade is your other class… So lets put Keiko next to-“
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“Neji!” Keiko screams as she opens the window to see Neji right there looking straight at her naked body which is nowcovered with a black towel. Neji smirks at her reaction and said “What? I can’t look at my girlfriend’s naked body.” “Do you know what my parents will do to you?” She asked him. “Yes I do… But did you leave me?” Neji asked with a serious look on his face. “My brother and father did it… I have nothing to do with it.” Keiko said as she opens the screen so he could come in. “For 5 years and 3 months… Me and you are still girlfriend and boyfriend… Someday we are going to fight each other you know that… My love…” Neji said putting both of his hands on her waist. “Oh Neji… You are the same kid that I meet along time ago …” Keiko said putting and arms around his neck and coming closer.
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"One minute did you guys hear that?" Sakura said looking at way they came from. Then she remember what happens. "Hear what?" Naruto said all clueless. Sasuke took a step away for Sakura, and Naruto. Suddenly a large dust came from behind for Keiko who looked pissed off. "Oh man!" Naruto screams shaking with fear. "YOU OWE MY SISTERS TWO PREFECTLY GOOD CUPS OF BEEF RAMAN!" Keiko screams as she grabs him by the colar and starts to beat the stuffing out of Naruto. "Ouch! AW! AW!" Naruto screams in pain. Then she throws him pass the red haired boy and face first right into the fence. "YOU LITTLE PUNK!" She yells at him. Then she started to walk away calmly. The question that came out of Sasuke "What did you do this time nuisance?" "How am I surpose to know you jerk!" Naruto yells as he tries to pull his head out of the fence." Sakura whispers to Sasuke what she thinks happened. "Girl who are you?" The red haired boy said as looks at the back of Keiko. She stopped where she was. Keiko glances at the boy and she shugs her shoulders and turns around. Sakura grabs Keiko's headphones off of her head and said "The boy with the red hair ask for your name..." "Oh Okay... I am Keiko Hatake..." Keiko said as she grabs her headphones out of Sakura's grasp. "One minute! SHE RELATED TO KAKASHI!" Sakura, and Naruto yells in shock. "Well it so easy to guess... I'm his little sister. Even Sasuke knew before you two." Keiko said as she signs. The red glace at me and nods start to walk away from them. "What's your name?" Sasuke said with a determined look on his face. "Who? me?" The blonde hair female asked pointing to herself as she blushed. "No. The one who asked Keiko for her name without even telling his name...Still he's quiet interesting." Sasuke said point at the red haired boy with the gourd on his back. "Oh I didn't know you were gay..." Keiko laughs. "I am not gay." Sasuke growls at her. "Are you happy?" She asked him. Sasuke just gives Keiko one of those 'What the heck! Does it look like I'm freakn' Happy.' look. 'I know him for somewhere but where?' Keiko thought as hard. "My name is Gaara of the desert... At your service...I interested in you and Keiko..." He said glancing at me and Sasuke back and forth. "Sasuke Uchiha.." He said smirk with pleasure. Gaara lookfor the last time basely on Keiko and lick his lips. 'Gross...' Keiko thought. "Tonight I am sleeping in my clubhouse. No matter what..."Keiko said to herself as she disappear into thin air.
Story Title: Catch me if you can Author’s capitalization. And, man, that used to be a pretty cute pokemon song…
Culprit: BlackCrystleOfNight Looking at her nice repertoire of stories, I have a feeling we’ll be seeing her on repeat offender week… 96-95 sues from now.
Summary: Maye is a young beautiful girl who has a past that wasnot a thing she neverwanted... Maya,herolder brother, and hertwo young sisters live within Hidden Village of Leaf... She stronger then her older brother who is even Jounin... chapter 6 now out... But have yet to see any character’s by these names.
Rating: Two Kunai- A Headbang Because I had the phantom feeling of banging my head on my desk while reading this <3
Full Name(s): Keiko With two bonus twin sister sues, but I’m not worried about them.
Species: Siblingus Sueis
Hair: ‘The first had silver long hair that covering her left eye’
Eyes: ‘but her right eye was black as coal’ Which kind of reminds me of the chairman from Genshiken… who was totally terrifying.
Markings: Ah, none so far.
Possessions: Neji’s balls in a jar, clothing that looks like an odd mixture of Kaka-sensei’s and Naruto’s stuff, oh, and a CD player.
Origin: I dunno…
Special Connections to Canon: claims to be related to one… although by the end of one chapter ends up making the stupid typo of his name. my poor kaka-sensei.
Speshul Abilities: I dunno
Personal Rants Now, I might be bias because I love Kakashi and will terminated anything that tries to fuck around with him, but this was just… awful. Paragraphs of doom, capital letter of PURE AND OUTRIGHT ANGER, lousy random misspellings, but I only gave it two kunai because what I skimmed of the characters in the beginning seemed in character. I don’t think I could say the same for poor Neji-kun.
Why do I have the strange feeling that either… this kid REALLY can’t spell or stay in the same tense, or english isn’t her first language…
“Okay… Um… Please introduce yourselves. “Umino Iruka asked them. The twins nod yes. “HELLO! I am Lilly and this is my sister Milly!” The girl with the hair down said loud really loudly. Nothing came out the silver haired girl’s mouth. “Who are you sweetie?” Iruka asked with a sweat drop. Still Nothing came out of her mouth but her music got louder. “Big Sis! Our new teacher wants to know your name!” Lilly screams at their sister. The silver haired girl look at her little sister with what did you say look. “I SAID THE TEACHER WANTS TO KNOW YOUR NAME!” Milly screams at her big sister. “oh okay my name is Keiko.” The silver haired girl said. ‘She doesn’t even look strong! She look just like Sasake… Cool and calm…It makes me sick!’ Naruto thought to himself. “Okay Keiko… I see you have the top grade is your other class… So lets put Keiko next to-“
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“Neji!” Keiko screams as she opens the window to see Neji right there looking straight at her naked body which is nowcovered with a black towel. Neji smirks at her reaction and said “What? I can’t look at my girlfriend’s naked body.” “Do you know what my parents will do to you?” She asked him. “Yes I do… But did you leave me?” Neji asked with a serious look on his face. “My brother and father did it… I have nothing to do with it.” Keiko said as she opens the screen so he could come in. “For 5 years and 3 months… Me and you are still girlfriend and boyfriend… Someday we are going to fight each other you know that… My love…” Neji said putting both of his hands on her waist. “Oh Neji… You are the same kid that I meet along time ago …” Keiko said putting and arms around his neck and coming closer.
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"One minute did you guys hear that?" Sakura said looking at way they came from. Then she remember what happens. "Hear what?" Naruto said all clueless. Sasuke took a step away for Sakura, and Naruto. Suddenly a large dust came from behind for Keiko who looked pissed off. "Oh man!" Naruto screams shaking with fear. "YOU OWE MY SISTERS TWO PREFECTLY GOOD CUPS OF BEEF RAMAN!" Keiko screams as she grabs him by the colar and starts to beat the stuffing out of Naruto. "Ouch! AW! AW!" Naruto screams in pain. Then she throws him pass the red haired boy and face first right into the fence. "YOU LITTLE PUNK!" She yells at him. Then she started to walk away calmly. The question that came out of Sasuke "What did you do this time nuisance?" "How am I surpose to know you jerk!" Naruto yells as he tries to pull his head out of the fence." Sakura whispers to Sasuke what she thinks happened. "Girl who are you?" The red haired boy said as looks at the back of Keiko. She stopped where she was. Keiko glances at the boy and she shugs her shoulders and turns around. Sakura grabs Keiko's headphones off of her head and said "The boy with the red hair ask for your name..." "Oh Okay... I am Keiko Hatake..." Keiko said as she grabs her headphones out of Sakura's grasp. "One minute! SHE RELATED TO KAKASHI!" Sakura, and Naruto yells in shock. "Well it so easy to guess... I'm his little sister. Even Sasuke knew before you two." Keiko said as she signs. The red glace at me and nods start to walk away from them. "What's your name?" Sasuke said with a determined look on his face. "Who? me?" The blonde hair female asked pointing to herself as she blushed. "No. The one who asked Keiko for her name without even telling his name...Still he's quiet interesting." Sasuke said point at the red haired boy with the gourd on his back. "Oh I didn't know you were gay..." Keiko laughs. "I am not gay." Sasuke growls at her. "Are you happy?" She asked him. Sasuke just gives Keiko one of those 'What the heck! Does it look like I'm freakn' Happy.' look. 'I know him for somewhere but where?' Keiko thought as hard. "My name is Gaara of the desert... At your service...I interested in you and Keiko..." He said glancing at me and Sasuke back and forth. "Sasuke Uchiha.." He said smirk with pleasure. Gaara lookfor the last time basely on Keiko and lick his lips. 'Gross...' Keiko thought. "Tonight I am sleeping in my clubhouse. No matter what..."Keiko said to herself as she disappear into thin air.