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Nov 16, 2006 14:52

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starstruck2 November 16 2006, 21:00:46 UTC
omg. I love this. <3

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riza November 17 2006, 04:18:14 UTC
Absolutely gorgeous. You've got the characters down perfectly, and your Jiraiya is a sexy old bastard. (In the best possible way.)

their scars (those that had never healed and those they refused to let heal) softened

A haunting line, and a great use of imagery.

(Ah. So she had merely been pretending. Manipulative, crafty, sexy bitch.)

Couldn't help but giggle over that line. Lovely. Again.

Excellent. I applaud you.

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lykomancer November 17 2006, 04:35:44 UTC
Oooooh, pretty~!

Very, sweetly, precisely drawn. Lovely.

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immelmanturn November 17 2006, 06:11:18 UTC
Beautifully done. I love the ee cummmings, so many props for that.

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infi_inficio November 17 2006, 07:10:49 UTC
Ah. That was very pretty. :D

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