[Deaths] well pre campaign

Jan 27, 2010 19:55

Title: and dust all in me hair
'Verse/characters: Deaths; unnamed
Prompt: 47A "the sunless way"
Word Count: 321
Notes: No, he doesn't know.

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The creak of the wooden waterwheels, and the breathing of the miners treading them, followed him up the hill from the silver mine; he might pick up a shift there later, if they'd take him. )

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taennyn January 28 2010, 04:38:41 UTC
Not sure. He, or someone very like him, shows up to Great Big Sea's Chemical Worker's Song, so. *hands*

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billradish January 28 2010, 04:37:45 UTC
I like it. The pacing suits the voice, slow and methodical, one step after another and so very tired. Kind of like the creaking of a waterwheel. <3

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taennyn January 28 2010, 04:39:07 UTC
:) Thank you. I wasn't sure that feeling would come through.

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coastal_physics January 28 2010, 05:00:00 UTC
<3 this guy.

lots.

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taennyn March 9 2010, 06:05:14 UTC
I wish I'd managed more words--it's been such an evocative image to go with the song for such a long time this feels . . insufficient?

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taennyn March 9 2010, 06:05:52 UTC
Sorry. Should I add warnings for pieces like this?

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klgaffney February 10 2010, 06:24:28 UTC
damn, he sounds tired. weary trudging along one foot in front of th'other, grim and resigned.

they might find you in a thousand years, cured like a ham in your clothes by what you went to wrest from the earth.

...there's an image.

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taennyn February 10 2010, 06:27:39 UTC
Oh, good. I wasn't sure the measured and the tired would come through very well, in such a short piece.

They've found more than one salt mummy. Poor bastards. >.>

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