Comments | named_by_rhyme: [Witches' Horses] Chevalier de Grammont

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[Witches' Horses] Chevalier de Grammont

Jun 28, 2009 10:46

Title: designated meeting point
'Verse/characters: le Chevalier de Grammont; Grammont, Sinclair
Prompt: 44B "blossom", coastal_physics: "a quiet suburb of an industrial town"
Word Count: 458
Notes: This is the other moss-covered slate bit. With some definite expansion from its original hundred-word form.
A sabor is a church.

( She dropped them down as quietly as she could, trying to time the noise of her hooves to the rhythmic pounding from the mill in the downtown core and aware that she was only half-successful. )

sinclair, herding the witches' horses, grammont, chevalier de grammont, list b

Comments 6

billradish June 28 2009, 23:16:34 UTC

*peers* Neat. The expansion is really nice, fills in a lot of detail and makes the whole thing a lot edgier. It makes me really curious about why he's there, and what the conversation they're probably going to have when he gets back is going to go like.

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taennyn June 29 2009, 00:10:33 UTC

\o/ Awesome. :) My horse is kinda patchy--it's good to hear I'm not fuckin' up too badly.

klgaffney June 29 2009, 00:17:00 UTC

i like the fact that she's pulsing her engines in order to hide the sound of her landing, and that she lands in the building.

...it gives the impression of abandoned ghosttown, in an otherwise habitable place, but he's obviously there for a reason, and it doesn't seem...right. maybe possibly because he doesn't see fit to share why, which in and of itself seems like it should raise alarm bells and sirens. now i'm all sorts of curious.

coastal_physics June 29 2009, 01:50:47 UTC

that, and the factory foundation would support her weight. :)

klgaffney June 29 2009, 01:56:29 UTC

a knack for finding covert and safe landing spaces=damned useful skill to have, yeah. =)

coastal_physics June 29 2009, 01:51:41 UTC

I like her peering at the growth, and being fascinated by it.