A Couple of Rants for a September Afternoon... - PG-13

[mystcphoenxcafe]

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A couple of rant-fics for a September Saturday. I don't know what it is about this time of year.... :lol

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[pwcorgigirl]

These are really good. I'm going to suggest a little light ironing for a sentence I had to re-read a couple of times in "Graduation Day":

Or rather, he does. Just as he had recognized the fellow feeling that prevented Chase from leaving, he also recognizes the one that prevents him from understanding - that paradoxical self-doubt in the middle of a nearly-though-not-quite-complete arrogance.

How about: Or rather, he does understand, but it takes awhile before it comes to him and he recognizes that paradoxical self-doubt in the middle of not-quite-complete arrogance. It's the doubt that's held Chase here too long.

Chase is the one who needs to listen to his sense of self confidence, not Foreman.

This will then segue into House's thoughts on Foreman. I just love the line about Foreman leaving AMA. Bingo!

I'm not a huge fan of ellipses except to indicate a pause in thought or conversation, so I'd suggest taking this one out: And then there are other days… days he could cheerfully strangle her. Just have it read: And then there are

[mystcphoenxcafe]

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Thank'ee's as ever!!! :-) Been fighting off something, whether it be allergies, or the local nasty I hear is going around town, so it's taken me a bit to get back to this. Couldn't resist getting it out for Premiere Day, though.

"It's exactly what I was thinking, that they shouldn't have just frozen in place like cows in a field. I don't know if another people saw it that way, though."

Yeah, I know what you mean. By this point in my life, I've had the advantage of hanging around enough people who know how to defend themselves that many of my illusions have been punted out the window. (The line about always choosing to take action is taken nearly verbatim from a gentleman teaching a self-defense mini-course at a Sci-fi con earlier this year. It is also one of my main philosophies in life.) Many folk haven't had this advantage though, so, it is one of the illusions that I enjoy puncturing. (Why let House have all the fun? :-D

[pwcorgigirl]

Something is going around everywhere, I think. I've been stoned on allergy medicine for a week now. It's not conducive to putting more than two thoughts together! :)

I really liked "The Opposite of Zen" in particular. It carries quite a punch for such a short piece.

[mystcphoenxcafe]

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Sorry to read that. Yay, fall! :-D

Thank'ee's! :-) I quite like it too. It's nice to learn that things which would probably come across as being too strong in person can be just right in fiction.

-Katrina