[Fic] Young Avengers, Spellbound

[mysolitarydream]

Why doesn't Young Avengers come with a warning lable reading "More addictive than crack"?

Anyway, new writing fandom.

Title:Spellbound
Fandom: Young Avengers / Marvel universe
Warnings: slash, canon slash though, so I'm not to blame
Characters/couples: Billy/Teddy
Rating: PG-13
Summary: It's hard grounding a teenaged superhero - especially a

Comments

[fullmetal_cute]

I'm gonna take a wild guess here and say you're from England.

You've got a good story, but in the future you may want to consult with someone about things like how the American school system works.

[mysolitarydream]

Germany, actually, but the point still stands I guess.

I thought about the school thing for a while, but all I can draw from are TV series, so some pointers would be welcome.

[fullmetal_cute]

Yeah, the point still stands (and I am once again made sad and angry at the American school system because your written english is better than most native speakers).

Okay, the things that leapt right out at me were the use of 'headmaster' to and 'double lesson'. In my experiance, the latter almost never happens in the American school system, and the we use Principle instead of headmaster

[mysolitarydream]

Well, if it helps, my dad's English, so I was raised a bilingual, even if I spent most of my life in Germany. ;)

Okay, thanks, I took that into account and fixed those more obvious flaws. I do try to use American English when writing for US-based series, but ever so often the British upbringing does interfere. Old habits do die hard.

[fullmetal_cute]

I always try to have a Brit-checker look over something I've done when I'm doing work for a British based fandom (or have British characters in it) so that I don't make too many glaring mistakes. Most writers use the terms and slang they're most comfortable with when they're writing. It's one of those things.