TOWJWAGABI, Part 2

[myrna1_2_3]

This is more experimental than I usually am. Usually, I totally know where the story is going and even though I adore comments and feedback and suggestions from readers, I've already got the story mapped out in my head, so the suggestions don't really figure in to the rest of the story

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[parallactic]

I'm of the opposite opinion about the Brian vs. Dan thing. The first chapter made me root for Dan, because Brian a) was controlling Justin's life b) assumed Justin's life was his business when it was Brian who'd ended it c) planned on ruining two people's happiness just so he could feel better about his mistakes. The second chapter swung me towards sympathy with Brian, because I share the same sentiments about being single, quasi-independent, and the commitment phobia (though I'm way, way more easy going about it than Brian.) Still...I like how Justin and Dan met, and Brian's fears don't excuse how he acted out. I'm sure I'll vacillate between the two camps throughout the fic.

Early Sunday morning, Brian stood in the middle of some nightclub, the lights strobing overhead in all the beautiful colors of the rainbow as beautiful, hot, sexy men, Jesus Christ, so men fucking, fuckable men, presented themselves to Brian.

I think there's a 'many' missing between 'men' and 'fucking'.

The scene where Brian works on Cranston just cracked me up. I could totally picture him doing this.

And if every once in awhile he looked down and to the left, ready to share some sardonic comment or trade wiseass remarks, well...that was just habit. And habits were easy enough to break.

This made me sad. Brian realizing too late what he'd thrown away, and that he misses Justin.

"That's your litmus test? Either a guy comes on to you or he's in a relationship? Those are the only two possibilities--couldn't it just be that they're not interested?"

Mm, I like ballsy!Justin. It's why I thought Justin was a good match for Brian over Michael in the show.

And it almost confounded Dan how understanding Justin was about his work. Dan assumed a student like Justin would grow quickly irritated at the time and attention Dan's job required.

This made me sad for Justin.

[myrna1_2_3]

I'm sure I'll vacillate between the two camps throughout the fic.

That's my goal anyway! I want Dan and Brian to be real enough that either one of them can be shitty and either one of them can be amazing!

I think there's a 'many' missing between 'men' and 'fucking'.

Whoops! Thanks! Will correct now...

This made me sad for Justin.
Me too. He's pretty young not to have many expectations about that kind of thing!

Thanks for the great feedback! I really appreciate it!