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Fic: And Punishment

Jul 03, 2008 21:52

Title: And Punishment
Author: papierparachute
Pairing(s), Character(s): Zane!Sylar/Mohinder, past Gabriel/OMC
Rating: hard R
Warnings: Spoilers for 'Unexpected.' Spoilers for Crime and Punishment by Fyodor Dostoevsky. General knowledge of what the book is about/that the main character's name is Raskolnikov is helpful. Sylar-centric. Unbeta'd. Also ( Read more... )

character: gabriel, genre: roadtrip, rating: r, fic

Comments 15

perdiccas July 4 2008, 05:31:58 UTC

Brilliant. I can't even make a coherent comment. This was beautifully written. Outstanding, really.

papierparachute July 4 2008, 15:57:47 UTC

Wow, thank you so much! Lack of coherence is the best compliment I could ask for.

bonniesrg July 4 2008, 07:47:50 UTC

"We're so similar. I see myself in you."

"I'm beginning to think you only mean that literally, Zane," Mohinder laughed, bringing one of Sylar's fingertips to his lips.

Hah was my 1st thought the 1st time Sylar said that.lol

That James was such a tease, he so wanted Gabriel.

It's cute that Sylar was relieved when he realized that Momo hadn't been with a man before either.

papierparachute July 4 2008, 16:03:09 UTC

Haha, I know, that was my first thought too. Poor Mohinder is the vehicle for my own innuendo projection!

violet_anchovy July 4 2008, 09:51:22 UTC

Like a hundred wailing sailors crashing against the deck of a sinking ship in the middle of a sea storm.

Oh, Sylar, always thinking about seamen.

I could keep you like a pet and you would depend on me for everything until I was the only thing in your world.

Yes! Do that! :D

But seriously, this story is fascinating. Sylar's POV seems very plausible, very real in too many ways to quote.

Also, I love this fantasy:

"Raskolnikov," Gabriel whispered to himself, and he heard James' voice say it in his ear, deep and rough like a secret.

"Raskolnikov, you're beautiful."

papierparachute July 4 2008, 16:08:59 UTC

Oh, Sylar, always thinking about seamen.
Hahaha oh god I'm dying. Of course there had to be a dirty reason my subconscious chose that simile.

Thank you so much! 'Plausible' is like the best compliment ever.

I'm glad you liked the Raskolnikov part; I wasn't sure about that.

ladywilde80 July 4 2008, 14:04:54 UTC

I am speechless. Who are you and where did you come from? XD This was breathtaking. I loved every line of this fic, and even though this is yet, 'another roadtrip' fic, which by all means is not meant to sound so blasé if you will, since I for one adore them. I was simply trying to say is that you have taken something that has been done before many a time and still; still you managed to put a spin on it that felt original and new. I was swept up reading this and I think this is easily one of the best Sylar voices ever. You nailed the character perfectly.

I look forward to reading more of your writing because this was incredible. Thank you so much for sharing <3

papierparachute July 5 2008, 00:41:44 UTC

I'm definitely blushing right now.

I come from the land of using LJ solely for private entries and celebrity gossip.
I'm new to the ship and Heroes in general (I was going through an 'I don't watch TV' phase when it started -- bad call, I know) so I'm catching up on what's the 'norm' in fic but I am so so pleased you thought it felt original.

Ahhh I was so nervous/hesitant about posting, and especially about Sylar's characterization, so I can't tell you how much I appreciate your comment.

Thank you!

frozenfoxfire July 4 2008, 17:54:30 UTC

Holy flaming hell.

papierparachute July 5 2008, 00:51:40 UTC

I will take that as a compliment, based on the "flaming." Thank you!

frozenfoxfire July 5 2008, 17:14:31 UTC

I couldn't think of anything else to say - I hope it conveyed how absolutely fantastic you are at writing and how beautifully you nailed Sylar's character. :D