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The Long Road, Chapter 1

Nov 23, 2010 14:18

Title: The Long Road
Author: erradnofmercy
Pairing(s), Character(s): Mylar
Rating: (this chapter) PG-13
Warnings: none
Summary: AU from "The Hard Part." Sylar hits the skids.
Disclaimer: Heroes is not mine, but it did follow me home one day and I’ve been keeping it in irons in my basement ever since >;)
Word Count: 6,101 (sit down with a mug of ( Read more... )

rating: pg-13, genre: angst, fic

Comments 21

zagethe November 23 2010, 20:05:58 UTC

You're doing really well with keeping the characters within character. I always appreciate that no matter how AU the story is. Look forward to more.

errandofmercy November 23 2010, 22:00:03 UTC

haha, thanks :) I'm still debating with myself whether Sylar can be good and himself :\

zagethe November 23 2010, 22:23:42 UTC

Well see that's the thing... I don't think Sylar knows what he wants. He wants to be good when it suits him and when it doesnt.... well people get hurt.

errandofmercy November 23 2010, 22:25:04 UTC

...which makes for excellent angsty conflicted writing! :D

greyelveneyes November 23 2010, 21:33:23 UTC

Oh man, this made me miss S1 so hard. I love the way you've written their voices, because it's still so them.

errandofmercy November 23 2010, 22:00:56 UTC

aww your icon :3

Thanks!

alicambs November 24 2010, 09:23:04 UTC

I look forward to more of this Mylar. :-)

errandofmercy November 26 2010, 03:34:18 UTC

Thanks :)

anachro_nomad November 25 2010, 05:35:41 UTC

This is sooo good! I miss Season 1 too! I think they are very well in character, and I cannot wait until you post more. :)

errandofmercy November 26 2010, 03:33:40 UTC

thank you! *btw your icon is hilarious XD*

kojonoyuri November 25 2010, 06:29:25 UTC

Excellently well done!

I love Mohinder's characterization and the tension, of all kinds, that fill this chapter. The ending was epic! I love it when Mohinder plays with Sylar a little bit.

My only critique would be that I kept getting confused about when I was seeing things more from Sylar's perspective or Mohinder's, but that became more clear as the story went on.

I look forward to more! I hope there is an update soon! :D

kojonoyuri November 25 2010, 06:32:31 UTC

Oh, and I forgot to mention I absolutely adore the banner you made for this story. I wish I had that kind of talent. lol!

errandofmercy November 26 2010, 03:36:02 UTC

Thank you so much for the feedback! Mohinder laughs in the face of danger, lol :p I actually was told to take some of the POV references out... *shrugs* different strokes for different folks, I guess. I will try to be more succinct in the following chapters. Glad you liked it!