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(FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam gmariam March 15 2011, 02:12:46 UTC
Title: Yet Another Argument
Author/Artist: Gmariam
Character/Pairing:Lily/James
Rating & Warnings:None
Prompt:
63. "Still I wonder why it is
I don't argue like this
With anyone but you"
-Corinne Bailey Rae, Like a Star
Summary: Lily and James discuss some things on the Astronomy Tower.
Author's Note: I love to write dialogue, and that's how this poured out tonight. I had to cut loads to hit the 500 mark. I'm rubbish at titles but hopefully it fits the prompt. Enjoy!

"Sod off, Potter!"

"You first, Evans!"

"I was here before you."

"I don't care. I like the view."

"You're not even taking Astronomy. I have N.E.W.T.s in eight months."

"I came up here to think. That's just as important."

"I hardly think contemplating the size of Carin O'Connell's breasts qualifies as deep thinking. I need to study."

"I need fresh air."

"Why?"

"None of your business. Look, I'll take this side of the tower, you take that one. We won't even have to see each other."

"Fine."

"Fine."

"James?"

"What is it, Evans?"

"What are you thinking about?"

"Whether or not I should jump."

"James! You're not!"

"It'd be a right bit quieter on the way down."

"I'm sorry."

"Get to work, Evans. The heavens wait for no one."

"James?"

"What?"

"Is everything all right?"

"Yes."

"Then what do you need to think about?"

"I'm trying to work up my wand to talk to Dumbledore."

"Why?"

"I'm quitting as Head Boy."

"Why would you do that?"

"Because I'm rubbish at it, that's why."

"You are not."

"I've had three detentions, failed two quizzes, and lost the first Quidditch match. I can't do it all."

"I think you're brilliant, if that helps."

"It doesn't. You just don't want to work with Robertson."

"You're right, I don't. I'd rather work with you."

"Bollocks. You'll be glad to be rid of me."

"I won't."

"You're lying."

"I'm not. Don't quit, James. You can work all that other stuff out."

"Not all of it."

"What else is there?"

"Nothing."

"What about me?"

"What about you? You'll finally be rid of me."

"You're not quitting because of me, are you?"

"No, I'm turning in my badge because I'm just not meant to be Head Boy."

"Dumbledore wouldn't have chosen you if he didn't believe in you."

"He makes mistakes. I'm one of them."

"What's with the sudden pity party, Potter?"

"Back off, Evans. I don't want to talk about it anymore."

"Too bad. Tell me why you're really leaving, and I'll tell you if you can."

"If I can? I don't need permission."

"You do when you're acting like an idiot. Go on. Tell me."

"I told you-it's too much."

"And you're sick of me, is that the rest of it?"

"Of course not!"

"Why, then?"

"This is why I can't work with you, Evans. Not anymore."

"I don't understand."

"I'm tired of it, Lily. I'm tired of bickering every night, of fighting after every meeting. I hoped we'd get along this year, but I was wrong. I give up - on you, on me, on us."

"Oh."

"Real articulate, Evans."

"Don't give up, James."

"Why the hell not?"

"Because I don't want you to."

"You have a funny way of showing it."

"So do you."

"I don't know how else to show you."

"Neither do I. So will you stay?"

"Not if you keep arguing with me about it."

"I think I'd rather do something else."

"Study?"

"No."

"Mm. You'll have no argument from me there."

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam museme87 March 15 2011, 02:23:44 UTC
This was the right touch of banter and sincere concern for me. It's nice to see James depicted as being vulnerable; that's a trait a lot rarer in fic than I wish it was. Very enjoyable! :)

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam gmariam March 17 2011, 00:22:16 UTC
Thanks so much! Is that trait really that rare? Because I can't seem to write James any other way sometimes, lol. I like it too - I think I have some sort of vulnerable hero complex. Thanks again! :)

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam charlieschulz March 15 2011, 20:25:22 UTC
That was really cute :) They seemed very real as a couple, and I liked how they kept up with one another in the banter.
Adorable :D

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam gmariam March 17 2011, 00:22:29 UTC
Thanks so much!! :)

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam liebedance March 15 2011, 21:26:13 UTC
Like Hillary, I liked the vulnerable!James. He just seems so worn down. :( but, really :)

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam gmariam March 17 2011, 00:23:21 UTC
Thanks! You know, I'm thinking of expanding this to a full little story. But then, I pick on James mercilessly in my fics so maybe I shouldn't, lol. Thanks again! :)

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam perilousgard March 15 2011, 21:51:16 UTC
Vulnerable James is win, as everyone else has been saying. Also, I love how you can read their actions in the dialogue. :)

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam gmariam March 17 2011, 00:24:13 UTC
Thanks so much! I really enjoy writing the occasional dialogue only piece - I love their banter, but I'm glad more come out through just their words. Thanks again! :)

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam eprime March 17 2011, 17:41:58 UTC
Aw, I agree with everyone, vulnerable James is awfully endearing.

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam julvett March 17 2011, 18:17:44 UTC
This was really cute! I could sort of tell that you cut stuff though, not that that's a bad thing... I think it seemed remarkably tender for how 'directly to the point' it is. Anyway, great job, I love Astronomy Tower scenes <3

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Re: (FIC;PG) Yet Another Argument by Gmariam factorydreams March 20 2011, 02:07:36 UTC
Aw, I really liked that. A lot of Lily/James fics focus predominantly on the James side of the relationship (James chasing Lily! James bewitching Lily's pants to ask her out! James pining over Lily! Sirius wishing James didn't just pine over Lily!) and it was nice to see Lily's concern for James as well.

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