so. "i must fly to tulane" is six syllables. (though of course, the 5-7-5 structure is more flexible in english, but if we're speaking traditionally ...) otherwise, no criticism. i actually rather like it.
in other news, erin needs a life. know of anyone with a spare?
on the whole i'm v impressed with the haiku. i'm not sure i would've thought to employ the age old japanese beauty in this new age live journal. the juxtaposition is beautiful and moving. and when i say tulane i say t'lane so it's one syllable anyway. you win!
oh, i'm impressed with it, too. i didn't even think of it in terms of modern vs. ancient juxtaposition, but the message itself conveys desperation and exasperation, which is poignant and fascinating. also, i can see your pronunciation point, so fair enough. an oversight like the six syllable thing was uncharacteristic of stephanie, so maybe she saw it that way, too, unless she is as enlightened as me and knows that the pattern can be flexible when translated from the original japanese.
(again, still on the lookout for a life if you know of one.)
I do believe I was thinking in the T'lane sense... or it was just very late at night. But I had read that syllables are a loose English translation of the Japanese structure, so it might work with Tulane. Anyway, I edited it.
Re: i don't mean to be negatiive..mustafanieAugust 23 2005, 05:33:20 UTC
I don’t mean to be negative, but “tounge” is actually spelled “tongue.” Also, "negatiive" only has one i. And "i" is traditionally capitalized in the English language. Also, when a person uses an ellipsis, the proper number of periods is three, not two.
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(again, still on the lookout for a life if you know of one.)
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