some poetry
so I was messing around with a different poetic style yet again and this is what happened. Let me know what you think about it
The Cold
- Upon Trying -
It was such a sickly sweet tasting candy
The first time I tried it
It empowered me to do that which I could not
It unleashed the deep seethings of my soul
Upon an unsuspecting victim
It allowed me to rise above caring
It alleviated all sense of feeling
Towards its target
It blended fire and ice into one short-lived monster
Destroying anything in its path
It was a frosted flame cutting down anything or body
It was a magnificent manifestation of unsaid words
Held dormant too long
It was that insatiable appetite fulfilled
It was that bottomless pit
That you never fall out of
- Upon Seeing -
It was that impenetrable fortress of a surrounding
The first time I saw it
It covered better than any blanket stitched
It held faster and stronger that was possible
Against unwanted intrusions
It defended more diligently than an army
It defeated more foes than the angels
That frozen refuge
It molded wrath and hatred into a cohesive unit
Blocking everything aimed at it
It was the ever-sharp sword of diamond
It was the unbreakable metal sheathe
Guarding frozen depths unknown
It was that bully's posse never to mess with
It was that uncapturable castle
That you never crawl out of
- Upon Receiving -
It was such a bitter horrible draining feeling
The first time I partook of it
It leveled off my high mountain top
It eroded the very fibers of my soul
The ever-innocent bystander
It eradicated all remaining thoughts of hope
It suspended all of my nerves
Snipping lines one by one
It infused a glacier into the sun
Ball of burning icy ire
It was the never ending onslaught
It was the destroyer of life
Removing rifts from time
It was that armageddon comet
It was that unstoppable freight train
With no headlight
It was cold
So very cold
SGMJr 01-31-05
The Cold
- Upon Trying -
It was such a sickly sweet tasting candy
The first time I tried it
It empowered me to do that which I could not
It unleashed the deep seethings of my soul
Upon an unsuspecting victim
It allowed me to rise above caring
It alleviated all sense of feeling
Towards its target
It blended fire and ice into one short-lived monster
Destroying anything in its path
It was a frosted flame cutting down anything or body
It was a magnificent manifestation of unsaid words
Held dormant too long
It was that insatiable appetite fulfilled
It was that bottomless pit
That you never fall out of
- Upon Seeing -
It was that impenetrable fortress of a surrounding
The first time I saw it
It covered better than any blanket stitched
It held faster and stronger that was possible
Against unwanted intrusions
It defended more diligently than an army
It defeated more foes than the angels
That frozen refuge
It molded wrath and hatred into a cohesive unit
Blocking everything aimed at it
It was the ever-sharp sword of diamond
It was the unbreakable metal sheathe
Guarding frozen depths unknown
It was that bully's posse never to mess with
It was that uncapturable castle
That you never crawl out of
- Upon Receiving -
It was such a bitter horrible draining feeling
The first time I partook of it
It leveled off my high mountain top
It eroded the very fibers of my soul
The ever-innocent bystander
It eradicated all remaining thoughts of hope
It suspended all of my nerves
Snipping lines one by one
It infused a glacier into the sun
Ball of burning icy ire
It was the never ending onslaught
It was the destroyer of life
Removing rifts from time
It was that armageddon comet
It was that unstoppable freight train
With no headlight
It was cold
So very cold
SGMJr 01-31-05