FIC Battleships, Tensions and Hello Kitty Panties (Paris/Rory, 1/1?, R) Drabble #1 for

[mrschimpf]

Title: Battleships, Tensions and Hello Kitty Panties
Author: Nate
Pairing: Paris/Rory, third person POV. And more, which I will not ruin here...
Spoilers: An alternate post-417 universe where the spring break kiss was played for more than laughs, Dean's ego was severely wounded instead of boosted in the drunken phone call, Asher is gone, Marty's

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[mrschimpf]

Hmm, I'm reading that and I think you're right about Paris feeling a bit pushed off to the side that Rory had done it before, despite the glow of her teasing fogging up her mind in that instant that it wasn't an original idea that her girl brought up and that I should've probably played down Paris's 'that's kinda sexy' reaction for something more grounded. Maybe I should do a mini-chapter where Paris out of the blue asks why she was part of the Battleship repeat and they could've done something different? Something that won't add tension (as Par obviously has a soft side for Lane here), but confronting her on why she wasn't special enough for another game and Rory explaining why she did Battleship; Paris gets an explanation, does her panicked flailing and Rory calms her down to tell her she is truly special and she should have probably picked another board game. Which leads to a game of Simon (or a video game of some kind) and more (original) fun, perhaps?

And you're certainly right about how you can't picture Lane with Rory, it's never been the most compelling coupling for me (and the incredibly medicore fic between them in the past proves it). But I think in the situation in S4 where the girls were budding sexually and Lane was trying to find herself, that's one situation that I think can work well where she can somehow be sexual. If I do get into a situation with all three girls I would be careful about how to frame it, and it wouldn't have the game theme, more of a confessional mixed with teasing and naughtiness.

Lane is one of the most abused characters on the series and the writers never really did her justice, they underwrote her, while Paris easily got the one-liners, so I'm trying to take a risk in exploring her and construing her as more than the show punching bag (sticking her with a guy who was just dull, making sure her first time was miserable and cliche with her becoming pregnant, Mrs. Kim). I also always feel that guilt that in being so pro-Paris I'm asserting in my fic that Lane needs to go away and is annoying; I've never gotten a review telling me as such but when something niddles me it just hangs around like that.

I am glad that despite that you did enjoy the story. I know it's always a risk to test out these kind of ideas that go beyond my usual 'banter-teasing-lovemaking' mode and adding in the curve of past love and an open possibility of future sparks within that third spoke, and I'm glad that you give me these insights that make me see that in the future I have to take more tact.

[ubiquitousmixie]

Oh I'm not saying in any way that you lacked tact with this: it's verrrry easy for something like jealous to be pushed aside when you're having a naked conversation! It may not even be out of character for Paris -- perhaps I'm projecting too much of myself into my imagined version of her.

I really like what you plan to do with Lane: I agree that she's butchered in fics, and it'd be great to see her handled in your capable hands. I am really curious to see how you will construct something with the three of them, and am very much looking forward to reading it!

[mrschimpf]

There's never anything wrong with projecting yourself into Paris (Dirty! ;)). But yeah, maybe a "You did this with Lane?" line of conversation would have been better. Maybe I'll put that into a second version of this chapter if I can find the right way to write it out into the existing body of the story. But really I'm thinking the Giselle comment kind of took her out of her usual 'WTF am I chopped liver' mode and made her think 'So she did it before, maybe I was better than Lane' in her usual mode of superiority despite her thoughts that the two women are hot. Because Paris, when all is said and done, is awesome ;). I'm going more with the mini-chapter idea more so I can get Paris into her own inappropriate cartoon panties to get just desserts on Rory...would she be a Care Bears or a She-Ra kinda girl :-O?

It's gonna be a challenge with Lane, there's no way around it. But if I can do it right I'll be stronger for it.