Black Magic White Lies, chapter 2

Jun 08, 2009 12:47

Title: Black Magic White Lies
Chapter 2 - "No! It's not what you think!"
Timeline: BtVS, alternate season 5
Genre: drama, mystery, action
Characters, pairing: general, Xander/Faith
Rating: R (for intense situations).
Summary: Xander thinks he has a little secret. He doesn't know that his little secret is a part of a big fat conspiracy.
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nothorse June 8 2009, 09:09:23 UTC
Hmmm. Not quite innocent dream or more?

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moscow_watcher June 8 2009, 09:15:02 UTC
Definitely more. But - the title of the chapter isn't accidental. :)

I'm very happy I managed to grab and to keep your interest.

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nothorse June 8 2009, 09:27:30 UTC
Oh, you have that. I'm really waiting to see where you are going with this.

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keith5by5 June 8 2009, 11:54:43 UTC
That was a great dream sequence, very effective and effecting.

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moscow_watcher June 8 2009, 13:45:04 UTC
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. I rewrote it many times, because this chapter is very important for the overall plot as well as for Xander's journey.

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keith5by5 June 8 2009, 15:18:37 UTC
Well they both came off as very in char.

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kudagirl June 8 2009, 12:21:40 UTC
Many truths came out in his dream. Now can he learn from those truths or use them to make choices?

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moscow_watcher June 8 2009, 13:58:36 UTC
his dream

*points at the name of the chapter*

Now can he learn from those truths or use them to make choices?

I'm happy you read it this way. I didn't want to spell it, but I wanted to make the readers wonder if Xander should teach Faith about good and evil. Of course, he says all the right words - but, unlike Faith, he hadn't paid for these words with his blood. And, in a way, she "sires" him, carries him into her world when she forces him to taste her blood.

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tvnerdgirl June 8 2009, 12:32:47 UTC
I have enjoyed this so far. The second chapter especially had both their characterizations down pat.

Can I ask a question though? The first chapter was in the present tense, and the second chapter was past tense...was that intentional? Neither one is bad, just wondering.

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moscow_watcher June 8 2009, 14:25:45 UTC
I have enjoyed this so far.The second chapter especially had both their characterizations down pat.

Thank you! This is my first Xander/Faith fic, I never wrote them before as the lead characters, and I feel relief when people say that I managed to write them convincingly.

The first chapter was in the present tense, and the second chapter was past tense...was that intentional?

Yes - this chapter has a catch, and I wanted to drop a vague clue that the events are not what they seem to be. If I formatted the whole text in italics, that would have too revealing. So I used past tense to separate the chapter from the rest of the story.

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tvnerdgirl June 8 2009, 15:46:02 UTC
OK, I thought so, just making sure. I definitely sensed that things were not what they seemed. It definitely works out well that way.

I always loved writing Faith as a central character because she has so many layers, but I was definitely worried that I wouldn't be able to pull it off, so I know what you mean. Don't worry though because you had both of their characters incredibly well written.

And it's definitely an engaging story so far. I look forward to the next bit :)

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moscow_watcher June 8 2009, 16:13:10 UTC
I always loved writing Faith as a central character

Just found your story "A Roof to Keep Out the Rain" on ff.net. I love how you write Faith. The line "Your idea of starting small is me trusting you with my life?" is priceless.

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mulder200 June 8 2009, 13:29:57 UTC
That was very disturbing and yet quite in character. I can't wait to see what happens next.

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moscow_watcher June 8 2009, 14:26:32 UTC
Thank you!

I can't wait to see what happens next.

Lots and lots of badness... *evil grin*

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