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femslash06. Because one woman is sexy, but two women are double sexy.
And now, the thing where two men are also double sexy.
Title: Shone a Light and Called It a Star
Fandom: Firefly
Pairing: Mal/Jayne
Rating: NC-17
Spoilers/Continuity: Takes place during and after SerenitySummary: Jayne's mind ain't been settled since they left Miranda, and this
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I like that you didn't make River the pilot and you hired someone else. (I wish you'd detailed him a little more, he sounded quite interesting.)I understand other writers' desire to leave the crew "intact" ( ... )
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I couldn't write my stories from the POV of just one character. (I've done it, in the past, and it's been extremely difficult for me.) On top of that, often I read fics that are written in a Firefly dialect, where it simply doesn't work. But although you wrote from Jayne's POV you didn't drop to his speech ( ... )
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Dude, tell me about it. I, um, there was one fic where I quoted William Carlos Williams? I think I can leave the rest to your imagination.
Largely because good feedback is what fuels writers and I don't want you to ever stop writing these two.
Okay, I'm the only person in fandom that's not true of. Fueled by my own ambition and impossible standards, I am. But I do appreciate thoughtful feedback.
you still managed to convince the reader that it was Jayne's thoughts and views we were seeing
Thank you. I try to strike a balance, you know? I've had long circular conversations with my betas that go, "Change it to this word." "But Jayne doesn't *know* that word." With Jayne in particular, I think a big part of it is staying within his vocabulary, his frame of reference. And that's true for everybody: I read fic where Simon is dropping "ain't"s and f-bombs, and I get the same feeling.
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Thank you, you made my world a better one.
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Brava. This was amazing.
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I really like this little tidbit of information:
He knew it wasn't smart to eat fruit where beggar children and pickpockets could see, but he'd left all his coin in his bunk anyhow.
And this: ha!
"You're stealthy like a herd of stampeding cattle, Jayne," he said.
Very enjoyable, all of it. Thanks!
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