Grrr

[mosaic]

So... I have completed part two of my cross-dressing fic, but I'm not very happy with it. I don't know what it is, but I just... I don't want to post it yet. I think it's because I have this idea of what both Luna and Neville are thinking and experiencing throughout, but I can't get my thoughts into words. Maybe I should try rewriting the intro, I dunno. I liked it as I wrote it, but now as I reread it, I'm not happy with it.

Face, you read it... do you have any thoughts or suggestions? Would anyone else be willing to read through it, too, and help me out? Please?