my first orginal fantasy story...*dies of happiness*

[moony810]

Welcome to my first ever original fantasy story, A Dragon's Duel! Please comment, and be gentle with the rotten fruit, though concrit is welcome. Oh, and, here's a quick pronunciation guide for the characters' names:

Mir'n: Me-REHN
Tar'k: TEAR-ik
Pyro'k: PIE-rock
Blizro'k: bliz-ROCK
Ileia: ill-LAY-uh

And here's the story, enjoy!

A Dragon's Duel

“Come on,

Comments

[music_lover3]

Oh, and also, you might want to think about separating the paragraphs. It's easier to read if you put spaces in between them. And, one more thing. Lj cuts are miracles from heaven. It might be easier to use an lj cut next time you have a story. Well, just thought I'd give you those helpful tidbits for future use. Again, I really liked your story!!!

[moony810]

I did put it behind a link, I thought, but I'll gladly fix it if I didn't.

[music_lover3]

Yeah, you did put it behind a link for the writer's ink, but I was thinking more along the lines of your own journal. It might be easier to put it under an lj cut for your own journal, if you want to. But that's just me. Anyway, that was my thought. :)

[moony810]

Well, it does take up a lot less space that way...

[music_lover3]

It certainly does. :)

[moony810]

Thanks for suggesting an LJ-cut. *bows formally* *cracks neck and knuckles* Well, off to do some brainstorming, both for the sequel to this, and for the Rozen Maiden fanfic I have to work on...

[music_lover3]

*waves regally to a new worshiper* LOL. Well, good luck with the brainstorming!!

[moony810]

Thank you, I need it desperately.