[SDF] [Moon Sergeant] [Forty-nine Seconds]

[moonsergeant]

Title: Forty-nine Seconds
Summary: Someone finally figured it out...how her blank eyes worked.
Rating: T (for profanity)
Notes: A Pre-TYL fic for Cleis.
Disclaimer: I own all the characters mentioned except Sarah Marquez, who belongs to mizumi88.
Warning: A very long fic. Originally 19 pages when opened in MS Word, Tahoma size 10.

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Comments

Review, haha~

[mizumi888]

I must say, this was quite the read. I have to tip my hat off to you. You really are quite the writer. No wonder it's so fun doing literary role-play with you.

I particularly liked how you wrote this in separated points of view, in first person. I personally rarely write in first person as I find it unusual and slightly awkward while writing it. Aside from that, I rarely find fics in first person POV that are written as well as yours :)

I found your characters very interesting. And the development of the story was just wonderful, seriously. On the technical side of things, I only saw very few errors! Great work on that for someone who hasn't written anything seriously in a long time :D

So this was what you were talking about in the RP. Nice, now I get it better. Apparently, our characters are birds of the same feather in more ways than one XD

...I really shouldn't be listening to Avenue Q musical songs when reading and reviewing. It's not conductive to making my brain work so I apologize if this is too short or blah. The musical's not exactly...wholesome. I'm really sorry ._.

Re: Review, haha~

[moonsergeant]

Thanks Milky! I actually find it easier to write First-person POV things. And I enjoy (literary?!) role-playing with you too!

Re: Review, haha~

[mizumi888]

Oh, I see. I suppose it depends on who's writing, hm? Well, I still think it's well-written, nonetheless, so I commend you on it. Keep it up! :)