Fresh blood?

[uraneia]

Hello all! Sort of new to this whole RPS writing thing, and I don't have a beta. I have no idea how much I'll be churning out (probably not very much), but if anyone's interested, could you drop me a line? (Taken care of- see note below!) I'm kind of anxious about how this turned out

Comments

[shaenie]

I enjoyed this a lot. It's got a good rhythm to it, and the dialogue feels real and suits them. Well done. I'll be looking forward to the rest. =)

[uraneia]

Yay! I'm glad you liked it. I am usually terrible with dialogue, so I'm especially glad that worked out.

[waqaychay]

wow, if this is your first attempt, i can't wait until you really get going! ;D this was very good. funny, sexy, light-hearted, and serious all at the same time. i love their telepathy and their banter and the progression of their relationship. very well done. *applauds*

one thing, though. “'Sit working?”... “'Sin the box,” should be "'S it working?" and "'S in the box," i think.

[uraneia]

Oops! Thanks for pointing that out; I was trying to think about how it would sound rather than things like grammar. *grins* Fixed now!

Glad you liked it! I'm always nervous posting in new fandoms, so I really appreciate the feedback.

[aranel_x]

I really enjoyed reading this. I can't wait for the next bits :D

[lokte]

Really enjoyed reading this. Denial central though!! Looking forward to the rest.

[georgia_mason]

Fantastic. I'm new too but you write like a pro.

I adored it.

It's what I've been going for. You do it better. End of.