four.

[moleyneux]

title: passport of indiscretions
type: original story
rating: mild r for suggestive content
notes: this is my first story with original characters so I need feedback. It's not a very well worked out piece (it's more of a sketch than anything else,I suppose) but I'd like to know if you think it has potential or not. Also, it isnt for those who shy away

Comments

[vinniebolzano]

i popped your original fiction comment cherry!:p
oops!

[moleyneux]

*blushes*

I'm glad my first time was with you. You make me feel warm, safe and fuzzy inside.

[vinniebolzano]

hey you should be satisfied with it because you know what its pretty brilliant i as u must have realised am a writer obsessed with details and the beauty of your piece is the fact that it is not that the momentum you build up is enthralling and keeps one interested everything is complete somehow but whn i come to the end i want more i guess thats your triumph as an author!

[moleyneux]

Oh, Im glad. I think I wanted to be ambigious at the,especially concerning Lydia.

We see it all through her eyes- there is so much going on here behind the scenes.

[vinniebolzano]

cant wait for your next piece!

[vinniebolzano]

hahaha!