In a beautiful world they would be a 3some and Antoine would realize that Marcus and Luke each fill a need in his life.
In the world I grew up in one didn't poach a friend's crush until they were well over it and even then sometimes not especially if you didn't have permission. Antoine is breaking that rule but it's catching up with him, I think.
a threesome? haha, i guess so! when i originally developed these characters, the threesome idea wasn't even in my mind, but then Antoine happened... and yeah, they do sort of scream menage a trois, don't they?
yes, poaching a friend's crush is bad. but Antoine's line of morals is a vague one, at best, but yeah, eventually he realizes when he's gone too far.
Well Capt. it is a scene I have been waiting to read about (after all you have described it to me one or more times.) Some of your paragraphs could be broken up a bit, but other than that everything seems to be in order
It needs more, I think. This is like the abridged, less dirty, underhanded Antoine... This cycle goes on for a while. I'm gonna add more to it when I can. But I'm happy you like it!
Ooh, ouch. Lovely and poignant and well-written, but painful. oh, thank you, thank you for that! you give my half-coherent 1 am writing such high praise! :)
Well, yes, that is Antoine, down to a pat. He starts with the idea of this being 'just another conquest.' but then life gets in the way as it never has before.
Beautifully written! I very much enjoyed Antoine's voice, even if I'm not all that fond of him as a person. At least not a teenaged person. It could go either way for him as an adult.
aww, you don't like him? i suppose not everyone can. he's one of my favorite characters to write, since his voice comes so easily to me. but i'm glad you enjoyed his voice, even if not him as a whole! :) don't worry, he gets better. it'll take a while, but he's getting there.
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In the world I grew up in one didn't poach a friend's crush until they were well over it and even then sometimes not especially if you didn't have permission. Antoine is breaking that rule but it's catching up with him, I think.
I enjoyed reading this.
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yes, poaching a friend's crush is bad. but Antoine's line of morals is a vague one, at best, but yeah, eventually he realizes when he's gone too far.
i'm glad you enjoyed it! thanks for commenting.
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oh, thank you, thank you for that! you give my half-coherent 1 am writing such high praise! :)
Well, yes, that is Antoine, down to a pat. He starts with the idea of this being 'just another conquest.'
but then life gets in the way as it never has before.
thank you so much for reading and commenting! =)
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