omg ok so first off, it took me six years to realise that taekwoon is leo, and i still don't even know who the other guy is, but here's the deal: THIS IS CUTE AS FUCK, OKAY
(it it weird that "taekwoon is half crawling, half diving for him, and he would look silly except that his face looks so dangerous." is the line that made me go OH LEO OK?)
quick beta comment: "[...] spaced-out staring at is not, in fact, an invisible something. its-" should be "it's" contraction form "it is"
i really, really like: "their kiss is careful, because taekwoon is fragile, so breakable, and jaehwan doesn’t want to scare him." it's such a sweet line.
i am so mad at you for being like, "oh i can't write, wah, fiction is so hard for me, i'm bad at it," because girl. girl. i'm gonna punch you. this whole thing flows really well, especially because there's no dialogue in it, and one of the characters is so reserved that our only window into the scene is through the actions and limited thoughts/feelings of this one character -- but you do it so well that
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YOU POST SO MUCH LOL and yay beta comment i will go fix dat now!
omg the only reason i could write this so well is BECAUSE theres no dialogue omg dialogue kills me it KILLS ME <3 <3 i'm a sucker for opposites too ugh (LIKE US ;) )
screech you SHOULD get into them they're all precious and hilarious EVEN IF you dont think their vocals are fantabulous I LOVE YOU SO MUCH <3 <3 <3
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thank you *u*
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i will be commenting further when I get home
<3
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(it it weird that "taekwoon is half crawling, half diving for him, and he would look silly except that his face looks so dangerous." is the line that made me go OH LEO OK?)
quick beta comment: "[...] spaced-out staring at is not, in fact, an invisible something. its-" should be "it's" contraction form "it is"
i really, really like: "their kiss is careful, because taekwoon is fragile, so breakable, and jaehwan doesn’t want to scare him." it's such a sweet line.
i am so mad at you for being like, "oh i can't write, wah, fiction is so hard for me, i'm bad at it," because girl. girl. i'm gonna punch you. this whole thing flows really well, especially because there's no dialogue in it, and one of the characters is so reserved that our only window into the scene is through the actions and limited thoughts/feelings of this one character -- but you do it so well that ( ... )
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and yay beta comment i will go fix dat now!
omg the only reason i could write this so well is BECAUSE theres no dialogue omg dialogue kills me it KILLS ME
<3 <3
i'm a sucker for opposites too ugh (LIKE US ;) )
screech
you SHOULD get into them they're all precious and hilarious EVEN IF you dont think their vocals are fantabulous
I LOVE YOU SO MUCH <3 <3 <3
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I'm on my phone, so this comment is short, but there are lots of feels!! I love your jaehwan here<3
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