Secondhand Smoke

[mithrigil]

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I have been sitting on this prompt for two goddamned months and have revised and tweaked it more than anything else I have ever written, including the M.A. thesis.

I am so damned proud of this piece. I hope I'm right to be.

Title: Secondhand Smoke
Author: Mithrigil
Fandom: Tokyo Babylon
Characters: Subaru, Seishirou
Rating: NC-17. Sex,

Comments

[intradependency]

1. Whoa. Like whoa.

2. Amazing, as it's so dependent on sensation and it /all comes across/, and the little snippets of object/scene/setting/otherness just make the sensation all the more real. (plus out of anything anyone could do to me, burning is my one no-go, and got terror sweats, and oh)

3. Will agree with lindensphinx that this is the most violent piece I've read from you. What strikes me with amazement is how you inhabit the wrong/the role of these guys. Despite what's passed between them, it's more that there's something fundamentally /wanting this/ in them, not in their roles. As an example, anything you've written in FFXII is so laden/wound with meaning around the world of FFXII/the archetypal roles withing FFXII; likewise with DDS and the horror/demand of demon-shift and the death of the world; but here? It's more that they're just people, wanting.

Don't know if I've made that clear, or described myself properly, or even if it was your intent with your TB arc (I'm a fickle reader, woe), but I get filled with a strange sense of... normality? about this. Setting, sequence, sex, sensation grounded in the real. Scars and sorcery notwithstanding.

Anyway. Impressed. And impressed with your range, as always.

[mithrigil]

1. :flaring blush!:

2. I have to wonder if I could ever have written this without the kink experience I have, just based on all the injury experience I have. And the answer might be no, but still.

3. If you are saying what I think you're saying, then I'm really glad of it--despite them both being magical and their world not quite ours, I am thrilled that they're something approacing real, here. This moment was definitely about their personal wants and their personal injury. I think the amount of guttural realism in this was helpful with that. I never wanted Subaru or Seishirou to be an archetype of any kind.

:blushing, still: Thank you so much.

[intradependency]

2. Aha. Ha. Ah. "It is all in the name of research. Now take the goddamned whip and [/strike]."

(Fandom turned me in a matter of months.)

3. Yes, I think that's it, the lack of mysticism. It brought back maddening memories of Japan. I could almost smell them/the place. Very human in the complexity of the lust.

[mithrigil]

3. Oh that makes me feel awesome. Thank you. Thank you so damned much.