Re: Pinch Hitting Editmister_troperJanuary 2 2010, 17:54:31 UTC
"Now, I was a history and not an English major and so sometimes I feel like you're calling me kind of dumb at some points."
So was I! Well, history-ish. That's where I get a lot of it from: nothing teaches you English grammar better than learning another language.
And it is intentional to the extent that I mean "stupid" in the sense that the trick itself is outrageously simple to perform, not in the sense that it's a trick for stupid people. Even Stephen Hawking uses a calculator.
"Also, the first paragraph is completely unwieldy."
Yeah, you caught me. I spent ages trying to make that succinct but still get the whole message and I totally overworked it.
"I think some grammar people would disagree on the who vs. whom importance..."
Not really, but I'll try and explain the unimportance more.
"...but its still a really tough read for an average joe and I personally wasn't sure whether or not I learned anything at all..."
That however is a very serious comment because, unlike fiction, if this doesn't inform, then it isn't anything. Could I persuade you to elaborate more? Is what made it a "tough read" the elements you already listed or is it something else that you can explain?
Re: Pinch Hitting Edittigerstriped86January 26 2010, 07:29:11 UTC
Looking it over again makes what I felt the first time even more convoluted in my own mind.
Perhaps its taking my intelligence for granted, perhaps that its so rule based that I feel alienated from the piece altogether or perhaps its just a personal style of writing that doesn't clique with me.
In any case, its a very well done and thought out article on something that most people simply would not rather deal with and would rather be wrong than corrected.
That being said, I wish I could offer more insight but I'm going more on gut here than anything.
So was I! Well, history-ish. That's where I get a lot of it from: nothing teaches you English grammar better than learning another language.
And it is intentional to the extent that I mean "stupid" in the sense that the trick itself is outrageously simple to perform, not in the sense that it's a trick for stupid people. Even Stephen Hawking uses a calculator.
"Also, the first paragraph is completely unwieldy."
Yeah, you caught me. I spent ages trying to make that succinct but still get the whole message and I totally overworked it.
"I think some grammar people would disagree on the who vs. whom importance..."
Not really, but I'll try and explain the unimportance more.
"...but its still a really tough read for an average joe and I personally wasn't sure whether or not I learned anything at all..."
That however is a very serious comment because, unlike fiction, if this doesn't inform, then it isn't anything. Could I persuade you to elaborate more? Is what made it a "tough read" the elements you already listed or is it something else that you can explain?
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Perhaps its taking my intelligence for granted, perhaps that its so rule based that I feel alienated from the piece altogether or perhaps its just a personal style of writing that doesn't clique with me.
In any case, its a very well done and thought out article on something that most people simply would not rather deal with and would rather be wrong than corrected.
That being said, I wish I could offer more insight but I'm going more on gut here than anything.
Wishing you all the best!
-tiger
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