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Re: Thine Editor Appeareth! pipisafoat December 28 2009, 23:00:57 UTC
(continued, sorry to be so long-winded)

Now, there are a couple places I would consider changing the wording:
  • Okay, fine, I'll explain it further, and even teach you a trick so that you can do it without even thinking about the underlying grammar.
    Because there is not a subject after the and, you need to remove the comma immediately preceding it.
  • "Who" a relative pronoun.
    "Who" is a relative pronoun.
  • Like the personal pronoun, the relative pronoun changes based on whether it is a subject or an object. If it is used as a subject, it is who. If it is used as an object, it is whom.
    There are just an awful lot of "it is"s around here. I would contract some of them to create a mixture of "it is"s and "it's"s.
  • The only thing to remember is that it is the relative pronoun's use within the clause that determines whether it is who or whom.
    Reword for easier accessibility for nonnative speakers/further clarity: The only thing to remember is that the relative pronoun's use within the clause is what determines whether it is who or whom.
  • "Carol" is the object of the main clause of the sentence. However, in the relative clause, it is the subject ("Carol hit me"), so "who" is appropriate.
    Here, "it" technically refers to the word "Carol" - I would change it to "the pronoun"
  • All but the second personal pronoun changes whether it is a subject or an object.
    For clarity's sake, All personal pronouns but the second change dependent on whether they are subjects or objects.
  • she/he or him/her?". If she/he, then who. If him/her, then whom.
    This is just me being neurotic here - Why are we looking at this female/male for subject pronouns and male/female for object pronouns? I personally would like to see this consistent, gender-wise, but I freely admit my neurosis; most people probably wouldn't notice or care.
  • (If 'it,' well, why are you using who?)
    Who is that neutered dog? It is Rufus. (but hey, now I'm just being a smartass.)
  • And this time, that's really it.
    One last little nitpick - you shouldn't start a sentence with a conjunction.
Overall, well-written, well explained, and a much-needed article. A job well done, says I. Thank you so much for your contribution.

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Re: Thine Editor Appeareth! mister_troper January 2 2010, 17:27:54 UTC
Thank you! Thanks for the grammar/syntax catches and for your very helpful edit!

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