Re: Your Editor Here!mister_troperJanuary 6 2010, 17:35:46 UTC
Thank you! This is awesome.
This is possibly the toughest edit I've ever given. Hope that's ok. ::: sheepish grin :::
It's okay. Not only is it going up "for posterity," as opposed to my journal writing, I specifically called you out in it, which, as far as I'm concerned, gives you the duty to get tough.
Even Shakespeare used the singular they. - I'll spare you the lengthy discussion on this, but it blends into the next point.
From here on, you do a LOT of backpedaling, tiptoeing, and rambling. - The only point I'd object to is "backpedaling," but you're entirely right that the back half deserves a cut. It's basically another article entirely. It bothers me hanging out a what and a how without a why.
Suddenly, Patricia becomes a MALE. "He" can be just as awkward and confusing as "they". - Which is why I think the term "universal he" is bad and misleading. It's not to always use it, it's to use it in place of "he or she." Since we know Pat is a girl, it stays "she."
But yes, thank you very much for the edits. It was really helpful, and vastly helps me narrow down what's useful and good.
Re: Your Editor Here!lacombeJanuary 8 2010, 16:09:28 UTC
It's okay. Not only is it going up "for posterity," as opposed to my journal writing, I specifically called you out in it, which, as far as I'm concerned, gives you the duty to get tough.
Cool. :-)
Which is why I think the term "universal he" is bad and misleading. It's not to always use it, it's to use it in place of "he or she." Since we know Pat is a girl, it stays "she."
But what if the speaker does NOT know that Pat's a girl?
But yes, thank you very much for the edits. It was really helpful, and vastly helps me narrow down what's useful and good.
You're very welcome! <3 Good luck with the second draft!
This is possibly the toughest edit I've ever given. Hope that's ok. ::: sheepish grin :::
It's okay. Not only is it going up "for posterity," as opposed to my journal writing, I specifically called you out in it, which, as far as I'm concerned, gives you the duty to get tough.
Even Shakespeare used the singular they. - I'll spare you the lengthy discussion on this, but it blends into the next point.
From here on, you do a LOT of backpedaling, tiptoeing, and rambling. - The only point I'd object to is "backpedaling," but you're entirely right that the back half deserves a cut. It's basically another article entirely. It bothers me hanging out a what and a how without a why.
Suddenly, Patricia becomes a MALE. "He" can be just as awkward and confusing as "they". - Which is why I think the term "universal he" is bad and misleading. It's not to always use it, it's to use it in place of "he or she." Since we know Pat is a girl, it stays "she."
But yes, thank you very much for the edits. It was really helpful, and vastly helps me narrow down what's useful and good.
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Cool. :-)
Which is why I think the term "universal he" is bad and misleading. It's not to always use it, it's to use it in place of "he or she." Since we know Pat is a girl, it stays "she."
But what if the speaker does NOT know that Pat's a girl?
But yes, thank you very much for the edits. It was really helpful, and vastly helps me narrow down what's useful and good.
You're very welcome! <3 Good luck with the second draft!
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